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Corinne
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since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

0 posted 2001-08-12 08:25 PM

A Noble Man

I’ve built you up into my ideal,
combined in you all the qualities
dreamt of in girlish fairy tales:
with certain vulnerabilities of the heart,
a clever mind,
flesh immune to malady,
forged together,
tungsten strength.

Men and women alike
gravitate toward you –
with your easy smiles
and gentle ways,
a sword in your hand
means safekeeping,
a chivalrous stand,
holding on to honor.

And love?
A welcoming renaissance
in your arms.

My knight? Perhaps.
In reality,
with armor clanking
and creaking,
perfection,
imperfect.

© 2001 Corinne Bailey

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

1 posted 2001-08-12 08:50 PM

Corinne--You describe so well how easy it is to make someone into something of our choosing and forget that they are human.

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

2 posted 2001-08-12 08:54 PM

Oy!!

-doreen

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2001-08-12 09:08 PM

Corinne~
Oh ... such a picture~

'And love?
A welcoming renaissance
in your arms.'

That's all that counts ! !
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

*LOL @ Doreen~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

4 posted 2001-08-12 09:49 PM

WOW, what an opening stanza...and the rest just builds on that...wonderful write Corinne.

jwesley

Logan
Senior Member

since 2001-05-28

Posts 1641
Arkansas

5 posted 2001-08-13 02:42 AM

Any knight worth his salt has a bunch of dents and rust spots on his armour..ahh, Cor, another one of your nice and lovely writes..very gentle smile

MoonShadow
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since 2001-08-02

Posts 943
Dark side of the Moon.

6 posted 2001-08-13 03:03 AM

The higher the pedestal... the harder the fall. It is said that a man looks at a woman initially and thinks she would be wonderful to be with for the rest of his life... never changing. Whereas a woman looks at a man and thinks... how wonderful it would be to spend the rest of her life making him into what she wants him to be.
I guess that is what 'dreams' are for. :-)

poetsguild
Member

since 2001-08-12

Posts 85
Florida

7 posted 2001-08-13 07:14 AM

Hey Core,

I remember this one. Did you revise? Nice to see a familiar face (although this is the first time I've seen your face - ha ha)

Melissa

shadow of the fall
Member

since 2001-08-13

Posts 83
Indiana

8 posted 2001-08-13 07:46 AM

we all want the armour, a knight to save us, and they sometimes stand naked before us, just as vulnerable as we are.

RMW
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since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

9 posted 2001-08-13 09:57 AM

Cor...The errant knight. Cervantes would have liked this. Bob

Corinne
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since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

10 posted 2001-08-13 11:23 AM

Thank you all, for commenting. Yes, we do sometimes have a tendancy to put people on pedestals, to want them to provide what we feel lacking in our lives.

And yet, it isn't so bad to discover that these people are just people, isn't so bad at all...

Thanks again!

Corinne

citizenx
Member

since 2001-07-31

Posts 189
motorcade

11 posted 2001-08-14 01:46 PM

My knight? Perhaps.
In reality,
with armor clanking
and creaking,
perfection,
imperfect.

Corinne, a wonderful spin on romantism.

shadows flicker sweet end tame
dancing like crazy mourners" magazine

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

12 posted 2001-08-14 02:30 PM

well we can all use an oil can now and then...and we all make noise when others would prefer quiet occaisionally...

nicely done... and a lot of truths to take from the perspective...

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

13 posted 2001-08-17 04:06 PM

Thanks, CitizenX and Captain!

Corinne

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

14 posted 2001-08-17 07:35 PM

Yanno, Cor I believe you have smacked me in the face with this one, and inspired something I truly wish I had the concentration to write at this time. I love this and its message.

I hope you're well.

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

15 posted 2001-08-17 09:10 PM

Very well expressed, Corinne! Great poem!

Eloise
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since 1999-11-27

Posts 1096
Wyoming

16 posted 2001-08-17 09:14 PM

Excellent write Corinne. Not everything is as we perceive it to be. Loved the last stanza.

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