Open Poetry #15 |
(my very first try at Haiku...is it one??) |
jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
5-7-5 syllables... Nature theme and subject... yeppers...tis a Haiku ... and I dont think they have to be titled... In the poetry workshop of Nans, in back pages there are several lessons on Haiku, Senryu and Tankas. and be forewarned...these lil gems can be addicting well done jw I know no one is to blame |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JWesley~ Delightful ! I like mine titled ... but that's my personal taste ! Your imagery is quietly portrayed~ Lovely ... and as JanetMarie pointed out ... they can be, and often are, addicting ~ But sooooooooo much fun. So nice to see the poetic s t r e t c h ! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
Very good for your first try.I think of haiku as poetic snap shots.I sometimes use them as seeds for longer poems.I also group them together in sort of an album and call them themes.I have posted two such albums called "Sea themes" and "Sky themes.I would be honored if you read them and commented on them. paladin |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
It certainly qualifies... Haiku are really fun - Write some more for us jw.. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I, Melissa Honeybee, do testify that I am a proud addict of Haikus, senryus and tankas jw, this is a wonderful haiku with awesome imagery - especially the first two lines! I love it, it's hard to believe that this is your first!?! Well, my library must have it I, also, title my haikus - it gives it more personality and flair. Do share more with us!~ Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... it is a song that rises from a bleeding wound...or a smiling mouth" ~Kahlil Gibran~ [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 08-12-2001).] |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wonderful! Thank you all for your comments, help, encouragement (as always) and I certainly will view Nan's pages. Been wanting to try this for a long time (and this may be the only one that'll ever qualify) but I'm ENGLISH DYSLEXIC and trying to write "structured" scares me, although now you may be inundated with attempts at Haiku! (just kidding...) Paladin...certainly will see if I can find them... jwesley |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
The poem is beautiful. I applaud your wonderful accomplishment. I've never done one so that strikes one up for me to do. I'll read more of yours first. Great Job! Sincerely, Regina |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Okay...gave it a title because I, too, prefer titles. jwesley |
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