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The Temptor's Wile
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The Temptor's Wile |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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arose from lamp by belly stroke. "Wish wisely." He said this with a smile. His eyes were cold with Temptor's wile. To you, I give, three wishes grant. Of two, just one can be undone by wishing for reverse of sun." for all the treasure dreamt to take. All the gifts of every land were mine for asking--my command. that sparkled gold in greedy fill; with crystal roads that led to door and servant's trays that spilled with more. from lifetime spent...upon my knees. Never daring eyes that greet and all my tears, in wash of feet. He saw my thoughts. He smiled through me. "Tell me, how much will you need? What is capacity of greed?" was chattel of a golden yoke. How heavy laden riches bind in thread of finest gold--refined. the magnitude of my mistake... Humility upon the floor, as he grinned: "Still want more?" "All my flesh be crucified. Always something, to placate-- the burn of yearn in satiate." He softened, crooned "most carefully..." But I knew what must be done. My second wish reversed the sun. and my life became the same. Sometimes within, at times with not-- but grateful for the things I'd got. "Just one more to ask of me. Tell me what it is you'd be. "Choose," he warned. "Choose carefully." and saw how quickly I became all that I did once despise and then I stared at Genie's eyes: Always, I've been there, encamped... just awaiting what you'd do-- should you be granted wishes true." From the lamp, he poured fine wine-- nectar from the God's own sup and bade me drink till I filled up. intensity of liquid time. My lips were limber--almost filled-- and then I choked: "I want free will. nothing more but taunt of rant. Genie take your magick spell-- begone with you to depths of hell. For my last wish? RETURN TO LAMP." [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 08-11-2001).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ Wow ! Just how brilliant is this ??????? VERY ! Caught me and held me - spellbound ! Do you hear me ??? SPELLBOUND ! Oh ... I like this very much ! It's one of those 'keeper thingies' !  You're holding court with a gifted muse~  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Of all the people that could've rubbed my lamp ... I had to get a 'quick study' ... come back here and let me out! ... .... Hey ... ... ... Hey ... ~~~ Loved it Rex |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
oh my goodness, this is deep, more than deep this is a revelation!! " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Of two, just one can be undone by wishing for reverse of sun." ================================ I crumbled then, beneath the weight-- the magnitude of my mistake... Humility upon the floor, as he grinned: "Still want more?" I replied in sigh of why: "All my flesh be crucified. Always something, to placate-- the burn of yearn in satiate." "Second wish," smiled He to me. He softened, crooned "most carefully..." But I knew what must be done. My second wish reversed the sun. All the gold returned to vein-- and my life became the same. Sometimes within, at times with not-- but grateful for the things I'd got. ======================================= AHHH my sweet POEtess twin... do you know how damn COOL this poem is???? what the Raven was to Poe the Genie has become to serenity... this is awesome K... the whole thing..from conception to completion...you ROCK. that reversal of the sun inspire? ... way cool baby...WAY  meI know no one is to blame |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Whew! Amazing..What a spectacular poem. So many things said here, in such a perfect way. I may have to go up in smoke now.. Sandra |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Oh, Serenity, this was fabulous!! Much to ponder in this gem. This is definitely my favorite of yours!! All writing comes |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
O My, you GO girl! WOW! What an excellent read me sista. You had me captivated from the beginning to the end. Ecellent, Ecellent! Maree |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
What an excellent write Celeste! You've really come into your own!! Bravo!! |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
This was imaginative and a joy. "Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve" |
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MoonShadow Senior Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 943Dark side of the Moon. |
A great one to recite as well.. sounds lovely aloud. Wonderful story and imagery. |
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citizenx Member
since 2001-07-31
Posts 189motorcade |
"All my flesh be crucified. Always something, to placate-- the burn of yearn in satiate." Damn this was amazing, I think you wished a fourth wish, to have golden words of poetry flow from your pen. shadows flicker sweet end tame |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
Bravo! Beautifully written...and lessons here to be learned. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
  Girl, this is wisely awesome!!!Okay, I now have a favourite by you - and, of course, my library must have this gem! I love this poem, can I borrow your muse?! Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... it is a song that rises from a bleeding wound...or a smiling mouth" ~Kahlil Gibran~ [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 08-12-2001).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, Can't top what has already been said. Enjoyed |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Enjoyed this, K. Good one. As I was reading, I was sending him back there, too. You didn't disappoint. e |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks to all. I just got to thinking about what it was I truly valued--and this came pouring out. And laughing to myself, cause Marge? Brilliance? HA! You should have seen how many edits I did to get this just centered...hardly brilliant, but thanks anyhow.  HUGS and LOVE to you all. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
love the title..and the contents and the heart that went into it. many gentle thoughts and huggsss coming your way ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Read much like a disconcerting fairytale. Not an easy thing to accomplish in a balanced way. Tell us another? |
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