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Open Poetry #15

Even, But Odd

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

0 posted 2001-08-10 10:57 PM

Even, But Odd

Can’t help but note
symbolism in your world,
equal to a procession of quadrates,
from large and literal
to small circumstances.

Broad as the surrounding greens,
mowed in checkered patterns
and fenced in small chains,
zeroing in -
on one of innumerable boxy houses
in simpatico color schemes,
nearer still to the perfunctory familial setting,
which, upon closer examination,
is anything but conventional.

Set inside a perfectly square
and small, spare room,
four walls bolster
the indignation
of your situation,
the absolute opposite
of sky.

© 2001 Corinne Bailey

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

1 posted 2001-08-11 12:49 PM

Interesting how you gave the reader a feel of 'zooming in'. Very effective style.

WRBreezin
Member

since 2001-08-04

Posts 212

2 posted 2001-08-11 08:04 AM

I could quote, but instead I'll simply say the weaving of your words was soul delightful!

Willie

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

3 posted 2001-08-11 08:08 AM

Our microcosmic world... even that's an oxymoron, isn't it?... I like this, Corinne...

RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

4 posted 2001-08-11 08:15 AM

I'm "floored" with the way you think outside the lines.

"Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve"

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2001-08-11 10:53 AM

I love the abstractions in this. . . and I love how you make them all come together in a nice, neat, 4-walled, picture. . .

great job Corinne!!

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

6 posted 2001-08-11 11:43 AM

Thank you everyone, appreciate your comments very much!

Corinne

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