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Mute Torment Double Tanka |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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Mute Torment  Sunshine in a box unleashes mind's eye torment prison bleeds stigma dead heart feasts upon itself for miracles molested ~ The scream of silence enslaves punctured dreams of soul depression slits throat trapped by wall's haunting hell of the sound of no sound By Melissa P. Monette |
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Flutterwings Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 288Maine |
Hi! Melissa, I'm new to this forum... but, I have to let you know that I really enjoy this piece. Deep, dark and soul searching. It cries for the breath of fresh air. It bellows for freedom. Kudos!  Love and peace ((~.~)) |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
This makes me think of the victims of the holocaust. Very powerful, indeed. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Certainly hellish, but too a breakthrough. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Melissa~  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
Yes, this is good. Interesting picture; reminds me of Goya. |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Melissa, I see this as a mute trying to get out of his/her own body...enjoyed...Cindi God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
dark Melissa. . . very dark indeed. . . you've shown the depth of this feeling very well my friend. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Sad message in a great poem. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Melissa- very powerful write.. hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I wish I didn't relate to this, but God, I do..... |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Thank you all, and Kathleen, I'm sorry that you relate~ |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Very potent, Melissa... I especially liked the 2nd half -- some powerful imagery and descriptions there. -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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