Open Poetry #15 |
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color me... |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA ![]() |
Dark clouds on my horizon Wishing for warm summer rains to wash my life away drip dry leaving me a clear colorless slate Can you see inside me? Or are you looking through me? and as I reach for a new box of crayons (the biggest box they make ya'know because life has too many hues and shades to be limited to red, yellow, and blue) I can't stop myself from wondering Do you want to help color me too? |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
This is fantastic...twould be marvelous to the right person just for you. Such a lovely, vulnerable thing to say/ask. Superb. |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Let me know how you make out I may get some of those crayons too! What a great piece of writing, and you absolute never disappoint the reader with the quality of your work, well done. ~ To see real beauty you must look with your heart ~ |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Jeff this is wonderful. Showing playfulness behind the longing. Or is that the other way around? ![]() Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Lady In White![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
This reminds me of the school psychologist who was wondering why the little boy always drew his pictures with a black crayon....and the little boy said "because that's all that's left...." ah yes, nothing like a new box of crayons, and supersize me, please.... enjoyed! |
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paladin![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
Here's one of my poems you might like. Coloring book Color the cow green The grass black and white Color outside the lines It's OK! paladin |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
I can't stop myself from wondering Do you want to help color me too? ---------------- A really powerful and wonderful piece..... So much is said within these crayons you hold.... Thank you....... ************************** |
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Sven![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I brought my own crayons if you don't mind. . . ![]() great job my friend. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
rascalx-- I like the way you used the crayon and colors to illustrate what you are feeling. Very well done! |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Vas, I actually wrote this with someone specific in mind (although she doesn't know it! heh heh ![]() Mysteria, Thank you so much for your kind compliments. And while you're here, take some crayons for yourself! lol This is one of those BIG boxes; I have plenty to share. Hey, who's hogging the "forest green" crayon? ![]() Dee, Thank you! Hmmm...maybe I long to be playful? or maybe I want to play for a long time?... (actually, I'm making light of my desire to be fulfilled by someone else's love ![]() Lady in White, Those super fat crayons are too cool. lol Especially when you're coloring blue sky! Just grab that sucker in your fist and start scrawling like a preschooler on a sugar high! (with my tongue sticking out of the side of my mouth as I concentrate! ![]() Paladin, LINES? You have lines on your paper? Darn, no wonder I'm having problems! lol Thanks for the cute poem. (green is my favorite color too so I say let's hear it for green cows) MyEnchanted Melody, Martie, Thank YOU for reading; I'm glad you enjoyed it! Sven, Since you brought your own crayons, can I borrow your blue for a sec? Someone "bogarted" mine! lol Hey, who broke the burnt sienna? SHEESH! Thank you, my friend; I always look forward to your kind and intuitive responses. - Jeff |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Jeff- I've always had a thing for crayons..LOL! This is really cool...like it lots! ![]() hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Hmm..Yanno, if someone colors you doesn't that make your sort of not yourself or does that add a certain special touch like the color of friends and lovers in our lives? ![]() ![]() |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
hey jeffy..i love to color..pass me a red crayon ![]() this is a great one jeff..youre poet has really come out of hiding aye? ![]() hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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