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Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

0 posted 2001-07-13 11:42 AM

strange
how quickly
tracings dry up

ravines and gullies
hold dust only
momentarily

bearing up
under sun's down

waiting for
wind
or rain
to change
and move.

Myself,

watching lizards
greet
horned toads

knowing,

soon
gully washers
will return
flooding all

waiting,

just sitting,
then
with ready rise,
brush this
grit and grain
from my
behind

having self-induced
a firm planting of
foot to backside

and in the stretch,
reach out
plucking water
from the sky,

if only
to give reason
to the tears.

with thanks to a Muse who really knows how to write...

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

1 posted 2001-07-13 11:44 AM

this is fabulous...laced with powerful images, passage of time, a touch of humor and then the clencher...letting us into your heart

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2001-07-13 12:00 PM

I would agree.. fabulous write!!! Images are sharp, and the passage of time noted well in your line breaks and progreession of thought.. Wonderful work you do!!!

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

3 posted 2001-07-13 12:07 PM

I like this.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2001-07-13 12:52 PM

Decaflame--I like it too...very much!!

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

5 posted 2001-08-07 04:59 PM

Decaflame-
   Wow...me likes this very much!
   Wonderfully penned.

   hugs,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

6 posted 2001-08-08 07:43 AM

you do what you do..so very well.....
perfect presentation and poetic intend here..
the imagery is superb...
your muse does just fine poetess Flame

wont you sing me your poetry
wont you take me to your home
wont you be for me forever
so Ill never be alone
youre my dream, its a beautiful thing

RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

7 posted 2001-08-08 08:56 AM

The grit's in the teeth and the grain is of truth and tears never need explaining. Enjoyed.

"Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve"

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

8 posted 2001-08-08 09:04 AM

Dec,
Well done and with humor.

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

9 posted 2001-08-08 09:53 AM

I have this interesting vision of you firmly emplanted beside a giant cactus - plucking water from the sky upon demand...

mirror man
Senior Member

since 2001-01-08

Posts 814

10 posted 2001-08-08 12:20 PM

Yes, this is very well done. Your muse is working well.

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

11 posted 2001-08-09 12:20 PM

Ah, a funny one! He he, and I loved it too!

~ To see real beauty you must look with your heart ~
~* Mysteria *~

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