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Rain mixed with sleet and woe
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Rain mixed with sleet and woe |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533
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The thunder demands our notice, unseen clouds sieve the shifting rain, storms never fail to emote us as it's winds lash the window pane. I recall Loves finest hour when wordless your head on my breast, the sounds of the winter shower, shallow breath, hearts beating in chests. My sheltering warmth your furnace, so soothing your smooth supple skin, no strife in the world concerned us our life was the Love we'd within. Loves sustenance fed desire, desire was quenched by our touch, touch never failed to inspire a fire we doused in the clutch. Remember the work that you missed? For I couldn't bear you clothed, I'd drag you to bed where we kissed one more day to me betrothed. Your fragrance I wore everywhere an ode to the odor of Love, aroma replaced even air tis obsession I'm writing of. Twenty years now Love slipped away a score of the sorely departed and always on cold rainy days I restore the pain of the parted. |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Ahhh...this was so sad Richard. Love lost is the worst kind, and it hurts the most as well. Isn't it funny how no matter how long we are away from the one we knew we loved, The memory never goes away? Great write! ~To see real beauty you must first look with your heart~ |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
*ssssiiiiiiiigggggghhhhh* memories of love lost yet so clear as if it happened today..... lovely verse here....  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Loves sustenance fed desire, desire was quenched by our touch, touch never failed to inspire a fire we doused in the clutch. Remember the work that you missed? For I couldn't bear you clothed, I'd drag you to bed where we kissed one more day to me betrothed. Your fragrance I wore everywhere an ode to the odor of Love, aroma replaced even air tis obsession I'm writing of. ====================================== Richard this is so softly sensual, passionate, and bittersweet...achingly expressed, but yet even though there is loss and pain associtated with the memory...I dont sense any bitterness...or heavy regret. This poem touches me, and brings up some memories of my own. well done, jm wont you sing me your poetry |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
The last stanza was the heavy one, for me. Indeed, "true love" does not always vanish mutually... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Well, first I have to say I always love your titles. They are so creative and appropriate. This poem, ah it touched me in that lovelorn place, I remember past loves in such a way as well. Excellent write. Sandra |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Heartfelt indeed Richard..nicely done ~Victoria~ |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
I too, did not sense any bitterness here. Just a perfect reverie of passion. Some memories we just don't let go of because it adds to our essence. Rain, means so many different things to each. Loved this! Sincerely, Regina |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
the rain. . . *sigh*. . . it's always been. . . hasn't it? well done my friend. . . well done. . . ------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
RSWells, C'est la vivre. Enjoyed |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Well done in rhyme and meter A sad ending to a heartfelt piece Liz |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
 this really got to me!" I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Remembering past loves whether 2 years or 20 it still never stops the memory of a beating heart, very splendid poem. |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Excellent expression of love. |
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Katherine Chandler Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 280Florida, USA |
I've always loved your writing even though I've often read such sadness between the lines. This particular poem was nothing short of wonderful in that you've expressed your feelings from the heart of a loving poet~ May love be yours, my friend. Peace Kate Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood. |
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Ava`sEden Junior Member
since 2001-09-15
Posts 17Southern |
I feel the Love........... |
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