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Inside the Window |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Dusk’s pink sky distracts and lures my willpower away As your eyes beam straight to the core of my vulnerable stability. This evening, there are no obscure lyrics--just melody-- As your arms wrap me up and carry me To an encounter of harmonized second winds... These are times when I have no need for reason, Just the violet of your charming perception... The railroad track just beyond the window pane Bears no effect on the gentleness you offer tonight... Desire’s wind blinds me, and I walk obliviously to its light, Where I drink of sweet satisfaction’s elusive wine, Which flows from your lips to the desert of mine... This dreamer’s fantasy lies within Luna’s intimate gaze And immortalizes just above the roof that shelters our heads From the disruption of interfering prudence... No attention is given to doubt in this space, Where we are eternally draped in love’s encircling flame... As rain falls, insatiable hunger is gratified By your attached heart’s natural reaction to my longing... Done with instinctive wisdom and executed with celestial grace, You guide my spirit to the awareness that I’ve my choice of stars on this cloud...it’s up to me where the creek flows... A vivid portrait of heaven is created right here beside me, And forever is the trail to wonder just behind your eyes... -kh it was love that first drew me, |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is breathtakingly beautiful, Kris. Very well written! |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
snowpants This was stunning, beautifully worded. Take care.....Sue Suetang |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
As your arms wrap me up and carry me To an encounter of harmonized second winds... These are times when I have no need for reason, Just the violet of your charming perception... The railroad track just beyond the window pane Bears no effect on the gentleness you offer tonight... =============================== Where we are eternally draped in love’s encircling flame... As rain falls, insatiable hunger is gratified By your attached heart’s natural reaction to my longing... Done with instinctive wisdom and executed with celestial grace, You guide my spirit to the awareness that I’ve my choice of stars on this cloud...it’s up to me where the creek flows... A vivid portrait of heaven is created right here beside me, And forever is the trail to wonder just behind your eyes... ================================ this is so sensually soft and visually sating wonderful poetic melding of imagery and nature to express and define the emotions and HEY...I detect a spattering of rhyme here and there!!   Sooner or later you will have to give in to the call of cadence  VERY VERY COOL write poetess K jm wont you sing me your poetry |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SnowPants~ Truly this is a beautifully romantic piece~ 'You guide my spirit to the awareness that I’ve my choice of stars on this cloud...it’s up to me where the creek flows... A vivid portrait of heaven is created right here beside me, And forever is the trail to wonder just behind your eyes...' Just LOVELY ~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Lovely, lovely...and what a final line*****SUPERB  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
WOW~this was one of your very best, and into my library it goes. ~ To see real beauty you must look with your heart ~ |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Seems to me a portrait of contentedness and acceptance. Enjoyed. "Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve" |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
kris, beautiful work hon! you just keep outdoing yourself i think. your work as of late is nothing short of exceptional. wonderful imagery in this one and your choice of vocab as always amazes me. take care girlie!! aims ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ love ya "but i see your true colors, |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
the imagery is outstanding here, truly remarkable. " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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Constance Member
since 2001-07-28
Posts 393Ohio |
snowpants, I agree with all above, and have to add that this piece brings to me the same feelings I got from "The Bridges Of Madison County"--a wonderful, passionate and tender moment, but something bittersweet about it. Love it. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
And THIS is why you so easily captured my heart. (well, maybe not so easily, but none-the-less, you captured after all these months). Sweetheart, this is an extraordinary write in so many ways ... I am just blown away. Your imagery and your transfer of thoughts and emotions to the paper are 2nd to none. The whole piece is beautiful from beginning to end and shows your heart and soul in every line. Maybe that is why I can't wait to be holding you again. The week just won't go away quick enough. Big hugs and kisses baby. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
wow guys... Denise: thank you! I'm glad you liked!  Sue: thanks, my friend, for your kind reply! Glad you enjoyed! J: hey you...thanks, girlie...and, yeah, I caught that rhyme in there, too...surprised me, cuz I didn't even mean it! give in??? NEVER!!! hehe...   Marge: thank you, m'friend...I'm glad you could stop by for a read! VAS: well, thank you...a 'superb' is a great honor! I'm happy you enjoyed this! Mysteria: thanks so much! that is a very high compliment! I'm glad you liked it! RSWells: oh, yeah...both of those big time! You got it right with that! thank you, my friend... Aims: hey girlie...thank you, my dear friend, for your wonderful compliments...I'm glad to see you...ttys -e ~~~~~~ Kathleen: thank you, my friend...glad you enjoyed! Constance: well, thank you for taking the time to read and get something out of this! I'm happy you liked it! M: well, my sweet, when I've got such a wonderful inspiration and muse, how could I write any differently??  AND, ahem, I've also had a great Teach, don't forget...oh, and that pesky week, trust me, I understand, baby...it's pretty much torture here, too...but thank you for your thoughtful reply...knowing you like this means so much...even bigger hugs and kisses right back at 'cha,  ...  sp  it was love that first drew me, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
snowpants: So beautiful in its love longing. Wonderfully done!! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
A beautiful weave of tender emotion and imagery, your heart transfers the words of love in a most delicate way pulling the reader along this road with you~ Superbly written piece~ |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Martie: thank you!! I'm glad you enjoyed it! butterflies: thank you for your thoughtful reply...I'm glad you could stop by! sp no power in creation, |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Beautiful! ~Tier |
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WRBreezin Member
since 2001-08-04
Posts 212 |
Stirring, and purposeful...the intent of your words delivers! Willie |
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