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Jaime Fradera
Senior Member

since 2000-11-25

Posts 843
Where no tyranny is tolerable

0 posted 2001-08-04 01:25 AM

1:
I am in the hospital.
The Bossy Nurse tells me
to start my own IV.
I have no idea what to do.
Clumsily, awkwardly,
I fumble, dropping, breaking something,
and blood starts gushing from a hose.
My blood is warm and sticky,
smells of chlorine and dead fish,
has the putrid stench
of watery decay;
makes me think of drowning
in a heated indoor pool.
The Bossy Nurse sneers,
"That's blood, isn't it!" I still don't know what to do.

2:
My sister is in town.
She comes to see me in the hospital,
invites me to go out with friends;
but when I rise to go with her,
a forest of IV lines restrain me.
I could lose more blood.
She is playing records on a sterio,
stuff from the sixties and seventies.
The songs follow each other
in smooth, uninterrupted flow.
I play another record,
a documentary of Mexico
narrated by my Dad.
I wonder how to get
more of these beautiful records ...
and if he's still making them? ...
Then I remember Dad is dead.
I ask my sister for an explanation,
but she is gone.

3:
a woman's moving in with me.
Nobody asked about this ...
I can hear her in the shower,
singing, humming to herself.
She comes to me,
cool, and damp,
smelling soapy and clean.
She tells me that she really loved
that record I was playing,
but I am wary of her.
a caretaker? ...

Background music:
Edey Gorm`e
Blame It On The Basanova,
the dance of love ...

Jaime

SmittenKitten
Senior Member

since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

1 posted 2001-08-04 01:49 AM

Hmm...interesting right. Definitely one to ponder. Oh and welcome to Passions!

do make yourself at home

~Krista

"Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you.
And all you can do is to go where they can find you."
~Winnie the Pooh

Constance
Member

since 2001-07-28

Posts 393
Ohio

2 posted 2001-08-04 02:34 AM

I liked this. Very original and fascinating read. Dream-like. Welcome, may I see more?

mirror man
Senior Member

since 2001-01-08

Posts 814

3 posted 2001-08-04 06:39 AM

Blame it on the Bossa Nova? Edie Gorme? What happened to Steve? Very good.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2001-08-04 06:46 AM

Jaime! It's been a while! Glad to see you back, and posting! This had a brief "staccato" feel in the description of the goings on around you...and I liked it!

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2001-08-04 09:19 AM

I like the changing scenes of this. . . indeed like a dream. . . but yet, rooted in reality???

well done. . .

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Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

6 posted 2001-08-06 12:36 PM

Hi sweet friend....Ive missed you...what an intense write this is...now listen,,,dont wait so long ok?

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

7 posted 2001-08-06 08:36 AM

Jaime - It's always wonderful to see your work. Your wonderful poetic senses are very fine-tuned, my friend. You paint a superb picture with your words again and again... Do stop in more often... Be well, my friend..

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