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Falling Words |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
You left the words Hanging like dead leaves Brightly colored To rustle in each passing breeze With whispers of meaning That hide the truths Gaily painted they stand out In a forest of grey and brown Drawing the eyes and the heart To yet another landscape Of illusion. Dead mirrors of the life That once was They dance in the wind as They fall One By One Gathering in piles To decay Like the feelings Behind them |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
the visual takes on stark imagery in each turn of the leaf and I have hung from this branch long enough... I shall meet the brown of ground then drown in mould... Well done sir...see what you inspired.... |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
wow, I think this is one of your best....wow....gonna print this one and reread this weekend....just love this.... gotta add one more WOW |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Cpat: Great use of metaphor in this ..enjoyed. Don't forget that it is the mulch from such that brings new life to much. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Fantastic Cpat! The melancholy leaves collected in perfect feeling. Very sad, but moving verse. Sincerely, Regina What lies behind us and what lies before us |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
Yes, this is very good. Excellent all around. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Painful, powerful. Great imagery. Sandra |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Really liked the unique way to used the leaves to express yourself here...VERY well done.... jwesley |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
though there is much sadness in autumn, there is great beauty, too, for one who seeks to see enjoyed this piece extremely well, Cpat! |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
You got yourself another "winner" here, Ron. Classic Cpat Hair-style of rich imagery, stong metaphor, and potent message. Very good work. -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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