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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2001-08-03 03:04 PM

In turmoiled kettle’s boil
The images were distorted,
But I recognized
Your face…

Old witch cackled,
Taunting again
That the visions seen
Would haunt me.

I with cloak wrapped
Close over heart
Knew she did not
This time lie
And turned again
To watch for you.

Knowing I dared
Not touch,
For fear of
Being burned

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

1 posted 2001-08-03 03:18 PM

I love it! Durn gud ritin' Ron!

Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

2 posted 2001-08-03 03:20 PM

mantle’s covering
shields not this revealing heat
nor visions taunting

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2001-08-03 03:27 PM

Thanks Interloper.. glad you enjoyed..
Lady... No cloak to cover
what is already warmed
by graceful heart sing

thanks for your comments!

mirror man
Senior Member

since 2001-01-08

Posts 814

4 posted 2001-08-03 04:29 PM

Very good. Reminds me of Macbeth.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

5 posted 2001-08-03 04:37 PM

Thanks Mirror Man... it was actually written when I was fed aline from Mcbeth on a challenge and said here... write on this... this was the result.

MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

6 posted 2001-08-04 07:55 PM

Makes me picture scenes from Snow White... Nicely expressed, as usual.

-MVS

"When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said."
--Del Casher

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

7 posted 2001-08-04 07:59 PM

Wow! Just wow!

Yes, it's true your writing has improved and still impresses

Melissa~

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

8 posted 2001-08-04 08:10 PM

my first word at the end, "Ouch!"

That's cuz it's a powerful write. Enjoyed, too, learning what 'inspired' it, heh heh.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

9 posted 2001-08-05 08:54 AM

MacBeth meets Poe I think ...
vivid, sharp imagery here...interesting blending of reality and fantasy.
well done poet sir

slow burn ...
light a candle for our love
So that we will always be
one on one in lovely love

rwood
Member Elite

since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

10 posted 2001-08-05 09:20 AM

You are wicked, and valiant in this one C. Spell casting! Enjoyed!
Sincerely,
Regina

wpwpoet
Member

since 2001-07-25

Posts 99

11 posted 2001-08-05 09:25 AM

the boil did burn
as I fell prey
the beauty did lie
as she caught my gaze.
woundefully written...wpwpoet

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

12 posted 2001-08-05 10:09 AM

ah, MacBeth, I was afraid you were inspired by all the horrible pictures I've tried to post with my poetry, BUT I think I finally settled on one and I hope I don't look like a witch!

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