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Samia
Junior Member

since 2001-07-28

Posts 47
Earth of corse!

0 posted 2001-08-02 05:33 PM

Leave this place!
Run from the cement,
electricity,
running water,
telephone wires,
and internet.

Turn away and go from here!
to where pillows tango in the sky,
and dark and light mingle
and tangle like lovers beneath
the straw,
in the pockets of giants
singing, and
swinging
swiftly, softly, gently
Look,
look at the soft greens of Earth
far below,
(the bellowing of the wind and thunder)
breath natural,
within the dark underbelly of
the night's sky,
studded with jewels.

Glow as brightly as
the eye's of giants,
walking amongst pillows in the sky.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2001-08-02 05:43 PM

(the bellowing of the wind and thunder)
breath natural,
within the dark underbelly of
the night's sky,
studded with jewels.
great imagery in here.... and it pulls you along into each following verse... nicely done!!

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

2 posted 2001-08-02 06:42 PM

Tango .... the Latin waltz ... love the imagery.

http://members.home.net/excalibur2501/Interloper.htm

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2001-08-02 06:58 PM

Samia~
Lovely, lovely ~

Right now any 'tango' on those pillows
would squeeze out a little more rain ...
and I've had 24 hours of it right now~

Gonna save this one to traipse about in the dry spell~

Beautiful thoughts you've shared.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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shadow974
Senior Member

since 2001-06-21

Posts 636
Michigan

4 posted 2001-08-02 07:04 PM

Nicely written, time to get away.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.

Samia
Junior Member

since 2001-07-28

Posts 47
Earth of corse!

5 posted 2001-08-03 01:00 AM

Cpat hair - muchas gracias! I think I do good with imagery. My problem is hooking it into reality.

Interloper - I'm from Texas too, it seems like theres a lot of us here. I love to watch a dance, and I even enjoy dancing myself when I'm in my house! (no one to see me trip and fall then) Many thanks for reading.

Marge - I wish you could send some of that rain up here. We've had no rain in July and it looks the same for August. As always, thank you for your thoughts and for reading my poem.

Shadow - Good to meet you and thanks for the kind words. I'm glad you got to "get away" when you read this.

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