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Poetic Cadence
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Poetic Cadence |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Once upon a time Words full of rhyme Flowed from my pen Reflecting where I've been They covered the page Releasing the cage Where I was trapped When my strength was sapped I longed to be Once again free To soar the sky Like the eagles fly Protect me my friend Help my wings to mend Through grace I'm healed As our bond is sealed The road had been long Changing life's sweet song There's a prominent new theme That echoes through my dreams Its cadence is ingrained In each and every quatrain That I now shall write As this eagle takes to flight All writing comes by the grace of God. -Ralph Waldo Emerson [This message has been edited by Lone Wolf (edited 07-12-2001).] |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Great work, LW...your cadence is just perfect! Love this... sp  it was love that first drew me, |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
rhythmic and exciting of message as well uh, speaking of cadence...I don't think you need the word 'to' in the last line...what do you think? [This message has been edited by VAS (edited 07-12-2001).] |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Beautifully written. Take care......Sue Suetang |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
I like the rhyming scheme in this one! good work! Cindi God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
As this eagle takes to flight Ahh,now LW, THIS is what I liked seeing, that you have spread your wings and lifted to the winds...oh, very good write and feel..very gentle smile |
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5_sweet_kisses Junior Member
since 2001-04-20
Posts 49 |
i really likes this. keep up the good work  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
It certainly is wonderful to be able to watch your work grow. I love this. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely written! I enjoyed |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
sp: You just have to love a good cadence! Thanks! VAS: Thanks, but I think it works either way. The message is what really counts. Sue: Thank you! Cindi: Happy to hear you enjoyed. The rhyme in this one just kind of fell into place. Logan: The wings are spread and the view is awesome!! I much appreciate your thoughts and replies to my work, my friend. 5_sweet_kisses: Thank you and welcome! James: Temptress: I believe that with each word we write, we all continually grow as poets and people. Thank you! Cpat Hair: Thanks to you! All writing comes |
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