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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I can not touch you Nor see the clouds in your eyes As the days and nights pass You in your world Me in mine I can hear you In the words And images painted On this blank white Temporary media Feel the pains described The heartaches The joys The love Only second hand Never first Never quite real I can’t touch you To feel skin, Flesh and Bones Or a heartbeat against mine As held in arms that care I try and soak up the tears And fears… And if I could Resentment would soon follow, Guilt eating like termites at The framework of what you think I am Or should be What we are Or are not The ideal… One you never have to clean up after Or scold or simply put up with in person You only need to picture in your mind What you think and want me to be Build a world of dreams around it And believe it Until Some struggle or imagined slight Turns that into a nightmare But hey… There are a lot of people A lot of places to indulge A lot of lonely hearts reaching For the same things But always second Never first |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
I hear you....and find that once again, you quietly, steadily, put forth common sense with a master's touch... |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
hmmm, I don't quite catch the gist of what you're saying here, unless it's "loving vicariously" perhaps. I'm sure it's just me though. There are some powerfully intriguing lines, for certain, Ron!!! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
this week I've read about squirrels, termites and cockroaches! HELP!  " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Lady: Thank you for the kind words... just rambling while thinking about what I have observed online..with peoples hearts and desires often colliding with reality. VAS... as for an explanantion you are right... in your guess. Thanks for the comment! Irish: Hey.. make next it will be grubs or worms... I wrote one about maggots one time (grinning) Never know what will show up next, do you? Thanks for taking time to read and to comment. |
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Constance Member
since 2001-07-28
Posts 393Ohio |
You in your world Me in mine I can hear you In the words And images painted On this blank white Temporary media beautifully painted! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Constance: Thank you for the nice words..I am pleased you liked that passage. Thanks for taking time to read and comment! |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Thought-provoking -- definitely. I especially like the graphic visual/metaphor of the termites -- that REALLY defines the sensation well. -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Thanks Mark... I appreciate the thoughts and as always the comment. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
Cpat...another great piece...sometimes though...a spoonfull of fantasy makes the reality go down...our second hand emotions help us at times...helen |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Yes... I agree without fantasy we would at times be in dire need. The write is just a ramble of fantasy on my part... what of an online relationship..what of always being unable to physically communicate...what of the involvements some have with a spouse or other....disrupted... what could be the truth of such a situation... lots of what ifs... and as I said..a ramble.. Thanks for the nice words...and taking time to comment. It is appreciated |
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