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Abandoned Ship
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Abandoned Ship |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Abandoned Ship Nevermore a worldly crew, to step upon this ship Nevermore a trite command to pass this captain’s lip Never will a stranger gaze upon these billowing sails From shores of old Majorca, or the eyes of highland Gaels Nevermore to skim along Pacific’s golden crest Or follow constellation’s pointed finger to the west No more log to enter pointless deeds of coward’s dare No more friends to cling to false illusion’s that I bear No ports of indulgence along this vessel’s course No more days of sorrow, no undue remorse I have left to drift at sea the phantom of a ship Abandoning the empty days of life’s uncharted trip Now that I have found you, a course is newly marked Upon an honest, deeper love, my heart has now embarked Your face glows in a halo, outshining silver moon Your eyes have depth of beauty the stars cannot consume Your heart is filled with honor, your spirit with esteem More splendid that the waters of tropic emerald green The edge of the horizon is streaked with crimson red To passion set before me, my trembling heart is led Never has a journey across the aqua blue Touched my heart so dearly as the thought of loving you Elizabeth Santos |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done... I enjoyed |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
The sun does seem to be rising in the west lately, doesn't it?... Can't think of a better direction to be set adrift... Nicely done, Lizzie...Hope you had a wonderful family weekend...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, This net will entangle many. A wonderful write. Sy |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
wonderfully well written! Enjoyed!!! Vibrantly stated message, with ardor employed! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
As usual I simply adore your poetic talent but I truely am impressed with the cadence of this wonderful work and I liked the two line format and the seemingly effortless use of perfect rhyme. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow - Liz this is so lovely and classical~ Melissa~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow |
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