Open Poetry #15 |
Forgetting's An Uphill Battle |
Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Looking into your eyes Holding you tight Seeing your breath On crisp Autumn nights The feel of your fingers Touching my skin No point in fighting A war I can't win The memories they haunt me And taunt me so Why can't I forget you? Why can't I let go? I've spent a lifetime Learning to run Learning to get out When push came to shove Your face is so vivid Here in my mind Forgetting's an uphill battle And I'm just too tired to climb |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
I AGREE! Forgetting is an uphill battle! This poem is really well done! I liked it very much, Thank you. Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
No rest for the weary, and the heart tires fast Just remember the lesson and learn from the past! Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind... |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I see that the struggle of letting go and the pain of remembering is flowing through these forums lately... Jeffrey, this is well expressed with great flow and rhyme, with an excellent ending that hits hard. Are you reading my mind?! Melissa~ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Powerfully said!!! I shall remain in hope your strength resumes for it is a matter of health for us all to find a way. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
boy oh boy! yes it is hard to forget! " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jeffrey~ Such a tender rendering from your heart. Emotionally penned - emotionally read. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
The point is never to forget; rather, learn to fondly remember when YOU choose to... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done..and a good ending... I enjoyed |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
When it starts hurting too much when I think about it...that's when I say to myself "Forget this." It is not good to suffer too long...but only you know the appropriate time to let go...James |
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polarflame New Member
since 2001-07-30
Posts 9Az, USA |
Very good poem. Indeed it captures the attention of the reader and makes them ponder about a similar Uphill Battle they might have contended. Reminds me of my gf.... ---------------------- the heart is an organ of fire >>PolarFlame |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
understanding this |
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