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JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

0 posted 2001-07-29 01:26 AM

if I had only five minutes to live
I’d spend them with you

if I had but few words left to my voice
I’d say them to you

if I had just one bit of emotion still in my heart
I’d trust it to you

if I had no strength remaining at all
I’d still look for you

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

1 posted 2001-07-29 01:36 AM

Well said with sweet devotion and to the point, boy, I do relate to your words right now

Melissa~

azblond
Senior Member

since 1999-07-01

Posts 637
The Steamy Desert

2 posted 2001-07-29 03:11 AM

Sigh...True devotion is so tender. Thank you for sharing.

Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind...

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

3 posted 2001-07-29 07:01 AM

Beautiful coming from a true romantic.

Waseem Cheema
Member

since 2001-03-16

Posts 369
Pakistan

4 posted 2001-07-29 07:03 AM

JLR it is my favorite from you.......Excellent
Love you ......

RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

5 posted 2001-07-29 10:02 AM

The woeful whiff of if...one should measure their time and words as though they were their last because you never know.

"Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve"

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

6 posted 2001-07-29 10:06 AM

if I had just one bit of emotion still in my heart
I’d trust it to you

if I had no strength remaining at all
I’d still look for you
==================================

what a tender, sincere inspire.
beautiful thoughts from the heart here JLR.
well done

slow burn ...
light a candle for our love
So that we will always be
one on one in lovely love

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

7 posted 2001-07-29 10:28 AM

Nice poem

Nate Dogg
Senior Member

since 1999-11-15

Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton

8 posted 2001-07-29 01:57 PM

A very sincere write....good job!!

Nathan

Constance
Member

since 2001-07-28

Posts 393
Ohio

9 posted 2001-07-29 02:00 PM

If this doesn't say love---nothing could. In just a few well-chosen words too. Very well put.

2dalimit
Member Elite

since 2000-02-08

Posts 2228
Mississippi coast

10 posted 2001-07-30 07:07 AM

Very well said.

Melton

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

11 posted 2001-07-30 10:13 AM

nicely said... devotion and caring in every line...

Miranda
Junior Member

since 2001-07-26

Posts 32
OOOOOklahoma!

12 posted 2001-07-30 02:30 PM

Short and sweet, and written to perfection. It's amazing how so few words can say so much.
Miranda

Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

13 posted 2001-07-30 03:13 PM

If...such a small word

such a large portend...

well done!

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

14 posted 2001-07-30 03:31 PM

absolutely wonderful, and the 'emotion' line is superb/riveting!!!

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

15 posted 2001-07-30 06:08 PM

Wonderful write, JLR. The epitome of love and devotion until the end.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

ParisGrl
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 610

16 posted 2001-07-31 02:31 PM

R.J.

Alright, Stop reading my mind. I don't like having my thoughts tapped into.

Beautiful poem, keep it up.

Laura

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

17 posted 2001-07-31 03:10 PM

Oh to have that kind of devotion for just five minutes! Beautiful!

Reel beauty is only fin deep!

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