Teen Poetry #5 |
The Change: Message From an Evil Man |
fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
The fear that grabs at my own heart is so Depressing, dark and dismal. Let my mind Roam free again! My hate's again my foe, That damned infernal thing does march and grind Away my patience. Such madening nonsense as my mind cannot Grasp at love or kindness anymore. Anger, death and hate do make their war, Fighting all that's good and mightily fought For through the ages. Is death in hades my own end? Do I the final judgement take? It seems my words of fear I'll send To those who dare live life for gain's sake. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
wow i just loved this |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hey Frac, very very nice work on this one! I'm quite impressed with the mood you portrayed here, and the method you chose for expressing it. It sounded very professional, incredibly well worded, almost like a monologue. In the first stanza you showed him hating his hatred, I love that, it's a marvelous paradox. One of your landmarks, for some reason I really really enjoyed this a LOT. And I'm adding it to my personal library. Will read more of your work, ~Allan You eat the brains of an old, wise man. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
*click* forgot to hit the button |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done here. I really liked this one frac! Hope to see more. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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