Teen Poetry #5 |
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so where are you now? |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
you promised me you'd never leave, you'd always ring, you'd forever care! But winters melting into spring, without you. With fresh picked flowers in my hair, You never called, I don't think you care? And springs burning into summer, without you. *~!~* So where are you now? while summer heats its sunblest beaches, And melts whatever snowmen stand. With the promises you made? Gone i guess. *~!~* Among millions of fallen leaves, I lie alone, I get over you. And autumn dries into winter, again. Icy parks and frosty mornings, I meet new people, I forget you, I'm not scared anymore to stand alone, again. *~!~* So winters back? been a year? It's not the snow thats cold this year, It's memories... i'd rather be alone this year? If thats ok with you? |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
I liked this. I have a friend, who I feel should be left unnamed, who wet through what this poem was about. I wish I could relate myself, but I have never been in that position. I am glad you are getting over whoever it was. He/she wasen't worth it. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Nice write here, Allie. I particularly liked the line baout you laying on millions of leaves. I loved how you went through each season...Very nicely done. I enjoyed it bunches! ![]() You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
this reminded me of a song that Destiny's Child (atleast the title did) where they go "so where are you now? Now that I need you, tears on my pilliow, wherever you are." Something like that. Great expression! |
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Poet Unknown Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 140Missouri |
that was a good write i enjoyed readin it Only darkness falls on those without souls |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
I liked this alot great job here It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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malangjan New Member
since 2001-08-26
Posts 1 |
Helen: If you break the mirror, will what is reflected in it cease to exist? Hector: That is the whole question. Giraudoux: Tigers at the Gates |
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since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was beautifully written here hun ![]() ![]() |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought this was ok. Not yer best, but still a good read. Hope to see more. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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