Teen Poetry #5 |
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the promise |
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sorrowfulangel Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 59Memphis,TN |
softly,raindrops tap against my window the gentlest of lullabyes making me feel dimmer farther away a sky so dark even the luminious moon was drowned beneath it's sable coat of clouds with eyes to the heavens,i search through it's depth the trace of a smile playing on my lips for i have learned that after every raging storm a rainbow is sure to arise "god is the biggest under-achiever I know,something good happens god is great,something bad happens,he now works in mysterious ways" |
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MoeRocko Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 166West Virginia |
Great Post! I like it alot ![]() "Nothing will stop me, and whether I'm here or wherever I may be, I'll always have the same feelings, I'll say what I feel." ~Lennon |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Powerful poem I loved it! Lauren |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
Best ending!! WOW!! Really liked this one... Great imagery!! ![]() Short and to the point! G'work ALLIE |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Very nice imagery in this piece. The ending was good. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Nice words of wisdom at the end. The description was wonderful- It painted a beautiful picture in my head. You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
for i have learned that after every raging storm a rainbow is sure to arise this brought a smile to my face..i enjoyed this a lot...thanks for sharing! ![]() ![]() ![]() Piece you life together and you WILL find holes. |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey this was really good. I thought you did awesome on the poem. Well done here. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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