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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL 
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“Nothing” I have no love I have no life No emotion Died so long ago Only a body An empty shell I long to feel But these things Are nearly dead as well A little longer Nothing shall remain And I will be Nothing as well |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Hmm...Interesting. Very Dark. I liked that about it. Hope to see more...soon. Very soon. You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
"Only a body An empty shell" A shell, you say...interesting thought. Shells are shed though...for something better. This body...and empty shell...does that mean you found something better? I think I'm thinking too much........  "I long to feel But these things Are nearly dead as well" Dead minds, dead souls...quite sad. "A little longer Nothing shall remain And I will be Nothing as well" Nothing...Scary thought it seems. I felt that this poem lacked a little feeling, not that you wrote this with no feeling...Then again, perhaps I'm supposed to feel nothing, eh? I found this a little short...maybe you can go indepth a bit more? Just a suggestion. This wasn't your best piece, but I did enjoy the read! Pleasantly dark. Thanks! -£êåh Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Your poem is very deep and full of emotion I can relate to it.I loved it keep up the awsome work! Lauren |
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