Teen Poetry #5 |
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Hidden Pain |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York ![]() |
The secret is out, The question asked. You said no, what’s wrong with that? I gave you my heart, you pushed it away. You tore it apart, you nearly killed me that day. The pain now almost to much to bare; the caged beast yearns for release. I look into your heart hoping to find me there, but you swept me out with ease. “Lets be friends,” you said, not knowing without you I am dead. I would give you everything for you, and all I want in return is for you to love me. I want to share love more than friends do, it was my heart I let you see. My pain is nearly unbearable now, it’s killing me inside. To let you go I don’t know how, for now it is time I bide. Through all the pain I have survived, never was it ever this bad. It was you who kept me alive, now all I am is sad. Though I hurt like I don’t have anything, I would still give you everything, My Angel. Love will come and love will go, but friends are forever (usually). |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
aww this is so sad *hugs*..i liked the poem..it flowed really well in my little head. i think poem wise you did really well in this...the content made me really sad though. give it a bit of time and continue to remain friends i think that if you really love her and you have told her how you feel then its best to stay friends and wait till she cones around..its a sad situation but i hope you make through it soon! ![]() ![]() ![]() Outside Ab Simpsons N.Home: |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
Thanx cherish. *sighs* I am trying to remain friends, but it hurts like hell. I don't know how I'd react if she got a boyfriend, I don't know if I can handle that. It takes all I have not to breakdown around her. All that stops me is the knowledge that if she knew my pain, she would hurt, and I don't want that. It'll get better eventualy. Love will come and love will go, but friends are forever (usually). [This message has been edited by HopelessRomanticGuy (edited 08-21-2001).] |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
“Lets be friends,” you said, not knowing without you I am dead." Richard, you did a wonderful job on this piece. Such a sad predicament you are in. You described your sorrow so well. The flow was extremely well done- the rhyming was nice as well. Thanks for the read...and as always, hope to see more. ![]() You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
"Though I hurt like I don’t have anything, I would still give you everything, My Angel." That is so sweet... Those last lines really made the poem. Rich, I am so sorry that you are in this situation. I know I hate that "Let's just be friends" line. It always comes after "we need to talk..." Aargh.. ![]() ![]() Awesome write. You put a lot of emotion in this, and I can see that you're really hurting. *hug* Hope all is well.. --Marie If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car. |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
*reaches for the tissue box* This was extremely sweet. Bittersweet, more like it I suppose. The situation in part reminds me of a saying.. "Just because someone doesn't love you in the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you for all their worth." I hope it all turns out for the best, hang in there, take care always, and keep writing. Great work. ~Ali~ Liefhe alle ten spijte van duivel. |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
Ohhh!! this is the pitts i hate this situation!! watching the person you Love with every little piece of you look at you in a different light, so before i comment im REALLY SORRY... Now you're piece, Very nice work here, i love the way you explained what happened and then summed it up at the end... speaking of the end that rocked!! GREAT POST, Sorry again ALLIE |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Your poem is really sad and I hope things get better for you soon. i loved your poem though and you expressed your feelings really good.Keep up the awsome work! Lauren |
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Jezziekaka Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 58where the trees touch the sky |
HRG~ I love this poem!! ![]() Jezzika be dangerous, unpredictable, and make a lot of noise! |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I know all about this. It's such a horrible experience to go through, this unrequited love. Hope all gets well. Keep posting. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
*bows* My back is starting to hurt from all this bowing, couldn't you ever write one I don't like? WinterWren |
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