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Allysa
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0 posted 2001-08-17 02:10 PM


I would walk amongst the richest.
Shake hands with all the superstars.
Give them a kiss on the cheek when I saw them.
Hang out with the guys in the bars.

I would fly off to Bermuta,
If the mood would strike me to,
I would dream the dream of dreamers,
if the dreamer was only you.

I would be a great musician,
or someone with a gold star,
I would put my hands in cement,
and then strum on my guitar.

I would have huge birthday parties,
and never wonder if you would come.
I would not care if you didn't show,
atleast I was someone.

I would sing a song for lovers,
all the people unlike me.
I would dance in the rain for hours,
and open your eyes so you could see.

I would be the one they envy,
the girl everyone wants to be.
I would never worry about being alone,
crowds of people would surround me.

I would wear a chain of diamonds,
but not to show them off like you do.
I would put a ring on every finger,
but not one would be from you.

I would paint my nails in the dark,
and not worry if it spilled.
I would swim away to freedom,
in a thousand dollar bills.

I would give you something special,
something to make you think of me.
If I could dream the dream of dreamers,
I would give you all of me.






Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself.  That's what I live by.

[This message has been edited by Allysa (edited 08-17-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-08-17 07:12 PM


HURA! I've finally caught up enough to reply to a poem FIRST! And MAN! Allysa! I LOVE this! This is one of my most favorite form you. Something about it sparked a HUGE interest in me. The ending was so sweet...And the poen itself was incredibly witty and charming. I loved it! Ugh! Thanks for the read!  

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

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2 posted 2001-08-17 07:26 PM


wow yeah this was really sweet i liked it a lot!

You know you 've completely descended into madness when the matter of shampoo has ascended to philosophical heights

Wood_Stock
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3 posted 2001-08-19 06:49 AM


I'm not one to use the term "sweet" a lot, but I thought this was great.
It sort of started off to be a bit superficial (however you spell it), with the interest in money over love and all that.. but the end blew me away.  You really made the poem with you last lines.  A great piece of work.

a real tear jerker.  You flow was almost perfect.  I'm surprised by the lack of comments.  look forward to reading more.

Wood_Stock.

allie
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4 posted 2001-08-19 06:58 AM


"I would dream the dream of dreamers,
if the dreamer was only you."

wo0ww0wwoww0w

This one line fully caught me... I think tahts the best quote ever,

infact i loved the whole thing... REALLY great,

ALLIE

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5 posted 2001-08-20 03:36 AM


very deep poem I like it keep up the great work!
  Lauren

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6 posted 2001-08-20 12:08 PM


AWSOME i love it i love i love it.. Your a very good writer and this was a very sweet poem keep it up!!1


Andrea

*You only live once, so live it to the fullest and have fun!

*gurls are sweet, Gurls are nice, but im the gurl with whip cream and ice

I hope y

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7 posted 2001-08-21 01:36 PM


Allie tooke my fave lines!  Hehe..

"I would dream the dream of dreamers,
if the dreamer was only you."

Allysa, this is one of the best you've shared with us.  AWESOME work.  This is definitely a tear jerker, as wood said.  Beautiful work... it's a long one, but WELL worth the read.  The rhyme scheme really helped the content as well.. oftentimes, when there's an awesome flow, it's easy to read, and you concentrate on what the poet's saying.. not mistakes in rhythm.  This is a VERY well written poem.  One to be proud of.  Wonderful work, Allysa.. just awesome!  

--Marie

If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car.

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8 posted 2001-08-29 05:40 PM


Allysa --- you suck!!!   j/k  You know this is really good *picks her up and gives her a big hug*  It's actually outstanding.  If only I can put you in my pocket  

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Allysa, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Ma

Allysa
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9 posted 2001-08-30 04:23 PM


LOL Acire.
Guess what!
It's a nitsuj poem too!
I actually talked to him on tuesday nite.


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