Teen Poetry #5 |
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Silence |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
Another day, Another night moments drag when your not in sight the shadows become my closest friend wishing my time without you would end Silence is all I hear knowing that your not here haven't heard your voice in a while something about missing your smile I call and call, no answer on your phone so I sit here waiting. Alone. Did you get the message I left earlier today or di you pass over it, let it slip away. Silene is all I hear knowing that your not here haven't heard your voice in a while something about missing your smile Time right now is my biggest enemy it keeps me from getting close to thee are you with "him" once again where is the chance for our relationshp to begin Silence is what I fear just wshing that things were clear nothing but silence for a while will I ever see your smile? we fall like the stars then rise like the sun..Repentence.Forgiveness.We are blame worthy hold us to our wrongs..but don't hold our wrongs against us |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
this was great...your first line reminded me of a song i know..keep writing. Regina |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
very heartfelt, I liked this very much ![]() |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
i lked this a lot, great job, i could relate It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
great job, i really liked this it was sweet and i can relate ![]() You know you 've completely descended into madness when the matter of shampoo has ascended to philosophical heights |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Wow! Awesome job! I really liked the repetition of the stanza. I thought it was well done. I could really relate to this. Thanks for the read. ![]() You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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punkrockerrobin![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
i wish you could see my smile. what makes me smile is thinking of you. the talks we shared. the memories i will keep. for i never knew such love could come from me. yet i know you do not wish to hear. so i will be quiet cus i know the end is near. you have left but i am still here. for i know you love her and not i. jimmy i wish you would write me an email sometime. robin i don't give up without a fight so boys beware! [This message has been edited by poeticgirl01 (edited 08-16-2001).] |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
I don't love anyone at all we fall like the stars then rise like the sun..Repentence.Forgiveness.We are blame worthy hold us to our wrongs..but don't hold our wrongs against us |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
"Silence is what I fear just wshing that things were clear nothing but silence for a while will I ever see your smile?" I loved that twist on the end, there. Nicely done! I really enjoyed this... was this written from personal experience? Aargh.. that's a very frustrating thing to deal with. I really like this one, I think you did a fine job with it. Nice work! --Marie If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car. |
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punkrockerrobin![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
uh yeah whatever i don't give up without a fight so boys beware! |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Great poem I really like it so keep up the awsome work! Lauren |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done here. I enjoyed the poem greatly. Hope to see more from you.... ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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