Teen Poetry #5 |
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XFalloutX Junior Member
since 2001-05-13
Posts 31NC |
The pain runs deep The pain of rejection To love one But not to be loved back That pain sticks with you To look them in the face and not to see anything back That pain hurts To live your life Knowing you weren’t good enough That is pain I live knowing this pain As a friend (ah my poems short and sweet...not....oh well...I just wanted to write down what I feel like right now) |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Wow, this poem makes it sound so simple. Simple, but true. I really really liked it. Thanks for the read "and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Heya Pat! Ok, about the poem: Nice...short...hit the spot pat. That's the good thing about your poems. You really know how to keep the reader focused on what you are saying. The ending really hit home though. I felt like that at one time, and I can relate to what you're feeling now, but in some ways, we all feel different about the same kinds of things. I hope you feel better soon Pat. There's nothing worse than having a friend feel down...Until next time, Pat. ![]() -Leah Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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Poet Unknown Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 140Missouri |
emotionally spoken very nice Only darkness falls on those without souls |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Very nicely done. So raw, So Blunt. I liked that. "To live your life Knowing you weren’t good enough" Those lines hit home. I know how ya feel, Deary. Sucky situation...Sorry....BUT! It made for a freat write. ![]() You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
I feel exactly the same. A girl I REALLY love has no real feelings for me and that DOES hurt, so I understand.... all too well. Love will come and love will go, but friends are forever (usually). |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
yeah it hurts a lot when you love someone so much and they dont love you back ![]() ![]() ![]() You know you 've completely descended into madness when the matter of shampoo has ascended to philosophical heights |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
"To love one But not to be loved back That pain sticks with you To look them in the face and not to see anything back That pain hurts" Those lines hit home for me more than any other. Ouch.. ![]() --Marie If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car. |
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