Teen Poetry #5 |
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Eternal Love |
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Poet Unknown Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 140Missouri |
I long for the warmth of days gone by, Cause inside my heart does slowly die. Remembering the days when everything was fine, Those days were simply devine. Now they're memories in time, And it's a bitter tasting bit of lime. As the seasons roll by and change, The love I have for you grows stronger and wider in range. Wonder if you notice or if you won't see, Exactly what you mean to me. Because my love for you, Will last for all eternity. Only darkness falls on those without souls |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I liked this one alot.Good flow and really nice. This was a very good piece. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I liked this... I thought it was very sweet, and the rhyme was well done. The thoughts you have here and beautiful... nicely done, Kyle! I enjoyed this. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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zarina Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 180 |
what to say..hm. it's nice. and it's sweet. yet a little sad. great rhyme. I am always myself. Isn't that enough for you? |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
The flow was a bit off, but It still went pretty well. Another well done write here. So bitter sweet. ![]() You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done here. I truly did like this poem. Very nicely written. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww this was really sweet kyle. i liked this one very much! good job here! ![]() S |
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~*brittt*~ Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 76East Haddam, CT |
Wow. This is really really great. I haven't been here for a while, but this is the first poem I read when I got here. What a way to start me off. I love it!! Keep up the good work! ~britt~ |
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