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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time 
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Generations come and pass just as fast, Into hollow graves bodies are cast. Is there a God? Where is he? People suffer, crying for help! Where is he? The world’s corrupt and falling apart, He wants us to change our ways, but won’t help us start. He just sits watching the world corrode, Sees us heading down Hell’s lonely road. Is there a God? Where is he? People are dying! Where is he? They say he’s watching from up in the sky, So much pain! And he’s just standing by? Just watches, letting us do wrong, The righteous road is slow and long. Is there a God? Where is he? So much evil! Where is he? Gave us freewill, trouble’s ours alone, Are you God? How’s this known? It’s not. It’s just what we think, So wash the lies down the sink! There’s no God, he doesn’t exist, And if he does, he’s really pissed. Is there a God? Where is he? Corrupting his “word”!? So where is he? There’s no God, there never was, Or he’d be helping like he supposedly does. But instead we suffer from all the pain, Things in the world drive some people insane. Violence, hatred, racism too, Are we all as ignorant as you? Made in your likeness, that must be it, Life’s a joke and some people quit. Where are you God? Why aren’t you here? To stop the pain, suffering and fear? Is there a God? Where is he? He’s no there, against all that you thought, Why would he leave us? Let us here to rot? There’s no God, there can’t be, It’s so obvious, you need to see? If there’s a God, where is he? But there isn’t where is he? This piece is in no way meant to force my opinions on God and religion onto any1 else, i in no way am stating there is no god..b/c i do believe in a supreme being...this piece was written out of pure emotion and speculation in a time when i was depressed for a long time...so any comments on it will be appreciated... " How can i feel if i can't breathe...?" |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
I liked this one... I don't agree with what it says. I have felt that way before... It sucks to be depressed like that. Very well written poem, good job. - Cody - |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Although I don't agree with this, I thought you did well expressing yourself. This is a very sad poem... It doesn't offend me at all, it's a well written poem, but the content makes me sad. I'm sorry that you're hurting. Yes, there is lots of pain in society. But that's any society for you, and that doesn't neccesarily mean there is no God. I do see where you're coming from. All I can offer you are my prayers and a *hug*. Stay strong  Well written poem. Your ideas and strong, and you've backed them up nicely. I enjoyed this... the structure and repitition I really liked. It fit the poem very well. Nicely done --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
I know how ya feel then...If you wrote this while upset and depressed and just wondering what the hell was going on around you. I liked this. Very raw. I myself, do believe in God- but thats not at all relevant. I thought you did an awesome job. You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
I know what you mean by this, i thought you wrote it well. good job It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
At the beginning of the poem it sort of seemed like you were writing to God, pleading maybe. That couldn't be true though because it then turns to stating reasons why He can't or doesn't exist. Interesting poem, I like how it's written. "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
I agree with every single line in this. You have expressed yourself extremely well. Such questions are what thousands of people ask every day. Most give up on religion though and rightly so in their opinion. I really, really like this. So much, it's going into the library. Thank you so much for this powerful and thought provoking poem. ~AF~ I'm a little teapot, short and stout! Here is my handle, here is my spout. *toot toot* |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
frist of all i like your name. I think i'll use it for a character i one of my fantasy novels. email me and i will create you into whatever you want. I like the poem alot. your very talented and i hope to see more. I ask these questions to but then I have my own world no one can take away and my own gods to believe in as well and the Greek, Roman, ect. -I believe in all things and I believe in nothing- Jeremiah Johnson I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
To be honest, I wasn't offended at all. I realize everyone has their own opinions and beliefs and I respect that. Everyone questions His existance, and they doubt His presence. You wrote this very well, explaining why you think He doesn't exist, and it does make sense. You wrote it from an honest point of view. Although I do agree with you at some parts at the beginning, I don't agree on the message at the end, where you conclude that He probably doesn't exist. But you wrote it carefully and thoughtfully. Everyone's gotta have a little faith though, ne? Until your next piece. Hope you feel better soon! -Leah Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... [This message has been edited by chasing rain (edited 08-18-2001).] |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I assume that everyone questions the existance of God at some point in their lives, just as we question the point of our own existance. Nonetheless, this was a very deep, well-written poem. Nicely done. |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
i can relate im sure most of us can....ive felt like this so many times. Very strong poem i liked it a lot...cant wait to see more You know you 've completely descended into madness when the matter of shampoo has ascended to philosophical heights |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
I'm not at all offended. I'm into radical views of religion (it's one of my fave points of discussion  )I think the poem was a little long to stick with such a simple rhyme scheme. Other than that, I liked it. "and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings |
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Wood_Stock Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 58The little yellow |
Old fozzy feels the same as me. You have an awsome thing going here, but some of the lines seem a little forced, and could easily have been taken out, because they sort of detract from it a bit. I've never held a strong view of god. I think he is a bit of an ego trip actually, we were created in "his" image. More like he was created in ours... though I do believe in some sort of supreme power, if you will... though I guess that has nothing to do with nothing, so I'll shut up. And hey, we all know about depression. Hell, they banned one of my poems, told me It was suicidal... ha! But that too is not important. I thought that for the most part, this was an awsome poem. And after reading it again, skipping over the few lines I don't like, it headed over to my library. Nice work. Wood_Stock. |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
I know how it feels to question our faith, im often guilty of this myself, and the poem was a strong was way of expressing your sorrow and depression, But i believe *not forcing this on anyone either* Gods way of dealing with the evil is the amazing amounts of good in our world, from things as simple to a butterfly, to as complex and the rush of emotions we feel in love. Anyway i loved your post ALLIE |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
I've been going to church for over 8 years now and almost everyday I ask where is God because I don't understand how he can let so many terrible things happen.But I love your poem and I see what your trying to say. Lauren |
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