Teen Poetry #5 |
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Don't Be Jealous |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
He sees the smile upon my face and the glossy moisture in my eyes. The frangrance of my soul and the rosy bloom in my cheeks, upon my satin white complexion. He feels the gentle touch from my fingertips and admires the length of my curling lashes, which he says look beautiful when graced with snow. He sees the long locks, descending from my head, which lie gracefully upon my back. I stand and wonder whatever he sees in me, theres no point in trying to live a lie. For a while now I've known that the resplendent figure he sees in me is YOU. "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"resplendent" what a cool word I had to look it up! LOL ![]() I liked this very much.... |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
Ah thanks!! I was trying to capture the beauty and loveliness, it took me a while to find it in the back of my mind too! Kicking Kim "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
well, I think you did a very good job ![]() |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Wow! Wonderful description here! The imagery was so well done. Nicw write. ![]() You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
AWESOME imagery! I loved the pictures your words brought to my mind... very beautiful, very beautiful indeed. Wow, this is one of my favs from you, Kim... definitely. Fantastic work. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
Definately a wonderful post, loved the ending! Actaully liked the whole thing a lot... *im going to say what everyones already said* great imagery!! ALLIE |
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Jenn Cirrincione![]() ![]()
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Great imagery... and terrifical ending. It really was unexpected to read. Good work here. ![]() Jenn "Baby I've been drifting away, dreaming all day, of holding you, touching you, the only thing that I wanna do is be with you..."Faith Hill |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
This was great i loved it. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very well done here. I liked the ending a lot. Keep posting ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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