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TearsOfPearls
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since 1999-09-23

Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa

0 posted 2001-06-28 04:08 PM

I don't want to fight,
I can't any more,
I cannot pretend
like I did before.
My will is broken,
my fire is dead,
this sadness inside
is hard to forget.

Please leave me here
inside my pain,
from my self-pity
I will rise again
but now I'm tired
and just can't fight,
please just leave me
alone in my night.

I know I've said so:
that I am tough,
but I'm tired now,
I've had enough.

Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice!

the_rescue
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since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

1 posted 2001-06-28 04:10 PM

AWWWWE hey anyone can rise above anything

you'll be alright..oh and good poem lol.

I'm not asking U 2 luv me I'm just letting out the truth no hold barred about what I feel nothing wrong with what I say

angel_2401
Member

since 2001-06-12

Posts 131
Cincinnati, OH

2 posted 2001-06-28 04:13 PM

Awww.... *hugs* I hope everything is ok! And this is a good poem.It really expresses your feelings! Keep smiling!

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

I'm a nobody, nobody is perfect, therefore I'm perfect.

FoxXena
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since 2001-06-13

Posts 141
where dragons play, children run free and foxes are never hunted

3 posted 2001-06-28 05:11 PM

Well done. Hope everything goes well for you.

~*~It is said that laughter is the shortest distance between two people...~*~
~*~I say it is the written word.~*~

[This message has been edited by FoxXena (edited 06-28-2001).]

DarkAngelOfTheStars
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since 2001-04-21

Posts 255

4 posted 2001-06-28 06:10 PM

aww this is such a sad poem but it reminds me so much of me right now im putting it in my library.the poem was awesome! and i hope everything gets better for you!

story of my life: I am so self destructive, I turn solutions into problems. Everything i thouch i ruin. Im midas in reverse

DarkAngelOfTheStars
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since 2001-04-21

Posts 255

5 posted 2001-06-28 06:11 PM

oops forgot to click the library thing...sorry

story of my life: I am so self destructive, I turn solutions into problems. Everything i thouch i ruin. Im midas in reverse

scout
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since 2001-06-16

Posts 175
no place owns me

6 posted 2001-06-28 07:29 PM

you got to find someone to help you keep on fighting...

xscoutx
"Son of man with one blow I am about to take away from you the delight of your eyes. Yet do not lament or weep or shed any tears."-Eze.24:16

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

7 posted 2001-06-28 08:53 PM

This is a very, VERY good poem!  Very surreal... First of all, the flow and meter is awesome.  I saw not one place where it broke in the slightest.
Secondly, I really liked the two lines: "please just leave me/alone in my night."  It says that you are living in darkness... powerful lines.
Third, I really hope you don't feel this way.  There's no reason to stop fighting.  Email me sometime.. we can talk.  I know how it feels to be so tired that you just want to give up, but please find someone you can trust and confide in.. someone to talk to.  That would do wonders.
Nice work on the poem.  I really enjoyed this.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

TopGunLauren
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since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

8 posted 2001-06-28 10:19 PM

Great poem I hope eerything gets better for you.
Lauren

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

9 posted 2001-06-29 12:50 PM

very sad...hope things are ok

...great job on the poem...bye..

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

obscurity of cloud
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since 2001-05-11

Posts 294
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10 posted 2001-06-29 03:22 AM

that is some rough writing you've got there! not stylistically speaking, of course, but you have a very heavy topic. I hope this is just poetic expression...and if you ever need to chat, you certainly have my email available. Keep posting.

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

11 posted 2001-06-29 08:34 AM

Everybody has a point at which they can no longer continue to be tough. Your poem has many true feelings in it that are easy to connect with.

Keep on sharing these pieces.

~AF~

Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!!

Heavens Tears

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since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

12 posted 2001-06-29 03:11 PM

Great poem. The flow and rhyme was wonderful, but the message behind it was even greater!

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

13 posted 2001-06-29 03:58 PM

This was quite sad, but you must stay strong no matter what. Life is a rough thing sometimes but you have to prove that you are hard enough to live through it. I liked the poem. You expressed your pain well.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Angelwings
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since 1999-08-27

Posts 222
IL, USA

14 posted 2001-06-29 07:54 PM

Wonderful Poem. I enjoyed it and look further to your next post.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

15 posted 2001-07-01 04:29 PM

I have one thing to say...be strong!!!
don't let anyone get to you
~*hugs*~

hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

knightlyshadows
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since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

16 posted 2001-07-03 02:50 AM

ooo this is great. i loved it. u did a great job on it. very good meaning behind it all. hope all goes well *hugs*
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I know Im not perfect but I can smile
& I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes

Elvenblood
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since 2001-02-17

Posts 409
Maine, USA

17 posted 2001-07-03 02:41 PM

I like how the whole thing is descriptive and then end... when you get to the end you can feel the finality of it. I love the piece, and the quote

draw a card

No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee

EagleScorpion
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since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

18 posted 2001-07-03 03:24 PM

TearsofPearls..
if you dont mind my asking...
You must have just gotten out of a bad relationship i suspect?
I believe I know how you felt when you wrote this..
I have the picture of two lovers, namely you and someone else who conquered so much together, only to find it all undermined by a separation...
And i see you aren't too eager to start all over again..
I know how you feel..
these things can heal with time

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

19 posted 2001-07-04 06:05 PM

aw this kinda made me sad, like you gaveup and i can relate to that. and i hate having to give up, but you're right, sometimes you just get tired and you cant fight anymore. i hate that feeling. but newho, great job, keep posting please

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

TunaKaHuna
Junior Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 19
United States

20 posted 2001-07-04 07:48 PM

Very good poem. The style of writing was easy to follow and understandable to read. Keep fighting for any cause you see fit to fight for. Giving up doesn't help anyone, and it is people's persistance that keeps us all going to succeed in life. Fight with strength!

--Brenton

If you give a person a title, then you really dont have to know a person...but, they may just be the person who can make you see of happy life can be.

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