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little_krazy_poet Junior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 41 |
The glass is shattering A man stands unable to stop it He is unable to save the disfigured person within the glass The glass is tumbling now as if it were an avalanche falling from the highest mountain top Alas he realizes the glass isn’t outside him, but within The glass is a symbol of what may become Making him realize that unless he changes his ways his life will surely shatter WRITE WHAT YOU FEEL!! AND DON’T LET ANYONE TELL YOU TO DO OTHERWISE |
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Maynard Junior Member
since 2001-06-29
Posts 12IL |
nice, i like the symbolism of glass/his life shattering "I have nothing to tell you or sell you for the moment... but thank you for asking." |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Hey Matt. I liked the symbolism you used here. Good write. Keep posting. |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I really did enjoy this one. I loved the anology of glass, and the way you introduced it. "Alas he realizes the glass isn’t outside him, but within" That was great. Thanks for the read! *Amanda* |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great sybolism...and the way you expressed this was awesome  ...enjoyed the poem...bye  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great sybolism...and the way you expressed this was awesome ...enjoyed the poem...bye im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Yes, wonderful use of symbolism. I really enjoyed this! The last line about his life shattering was very good. Nice work, indeed. Look forward to reading more. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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Barelybreathing Junior Member
since 2000-04-26
Posts 46 |
THIs is great!! I got this little click when I read it.. 'The greatest thing in the world is to know how to be one's own.' |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
This is a great use of symbolism! |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
That was great. Good symbolism.  Bel |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
I think everybody has at one point had a "falling glass" inside of them. Awesome imagery. Enjoyed the poem. - Cody - |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Oh, I like indeed! Powerful poem with an excellent message here! Whew! Awesome write! Rhonda  "Amy, can you PLEASE come to Spain with us so that we have someone to keep Rhonda calm?" - Mr. Ardiel *insert hysterical laughter from me here* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
What you said in this poem was very nice. I really liked how it all came out. Great use of symbolism, not too deep, but deep enough. I enjoyed this one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Great writing my friend. I like the sort of explanation in the end. It makes the poem more understandable. Keep it up and keep sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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