Teen Poetry #5 |
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Comedy of the Stars |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Comedy of the Stars Night has come, And nothing makes a sound... Yet if you listen closely You can here the laughter Of the stars. They laugh at the moon, For in the sky, it seems to be An oversized star Glaring. They chuckle For they will never change In being As the moon does each month. They've seen much more Much more than the moon ever will And giggle when the moon protests That it has indeed seen more nights Than the stars. They jest For when the time comes For a new moon The stars laugh and say "You are still the same silly thing you were Last month." The moon does nothing But sits and waits For a star To explode. Who has the last laugh now? ===== Ok, I know...certainly not my best...I can take that. I just needed something different. ![]() -Leah Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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Heavens Tears![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
This was very nice. I liked the ending. It was sort of ironic. Great job. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
HeHe- I liked this one Leah. The bully stars in the end got what they deserved. LOL. BUT! ![]() Nice write. You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Bull stars? haha.....I liked this one. Thought is was rockin' ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I really liked this... something different... definitely a different look on things. It wasn't your best, but still very good nonetheless. I liked the whole vocabulary and tone of the poem... I thought it was creative, given the content. Nicely done, Leah! I really enjoyed this! --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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punkrockerrobin![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
awww how pretty robin i don't give up without a fight so boys beware! |
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