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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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THE PANTHER The panther walks its jungle, roaming with a loose jointed gate His yellow eyes slit through with flecks of black mirror its soul a soul filled with instinct to pounce, to ravage, to violate..... Spotting an unsuspecting panther, grinning with its feline grin Its instinct to hunt, to eat, to violate... takes over its senses With a steady gate along the soft forest bed no noise, no warning no chance..... with one vicious pounce he has the panther beneath him she fights with all her might seeing a crazed look in her fellow panther' s eye she quits her struggles to be pounced, to be ravaged to be violated..... Regina [This message has been edited by Linc (edited 08-03-2001).] |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
Ooooh...  I really liked this Regi!! Awesome work!!  |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, I edited the second ' f ' in from this is a great poem ! -- Linc "Blood Moon" |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
What f...? Anyway, this was cool, I could almost picture it. Great work.. Jenn "Baby I've been drifting away, dreaming all day, of holding you, touching you, the only thing that I wanna do is be with you..."Faith Hill |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Damn Regina. Are you alright? I hope that someone shot and killed this panther... Your imagery is amazing. The message is loud and clear and the way you have descibed it sent shivers up my spine! Once again you have wowed me. Great job. ~AF~ "Reality is just a crutch for people who can't cope with drugs." -- Robin Williams |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
the imagery is incredible and the message is strong and very powerful! I loved it. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
can i say more about the imagery...amazing...i liked it. as i liked it the first time...great job,Ina. "if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take" - when thugs cry- |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
I agree with everyone...the imagery was awesome. The way you described the panther was point blank. I liked the way you gave a sense of panic at the end. Very well done...very well done indeed, both first and second time! -Leah Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this one a lot. Well done here! I won't ask what's wrong cuz this was from teen4.....i hope it's all over though Regi! *hugs*  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
Very very strong emotions here... Very very good imagery *sorry to use such a common post response* but how can you avoid it after reading this poem... Great Work, ALLIE |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Regi... omgosh... the imagery... and the emotions... wow! This poem is AMAZING.. one of your best, definitely. BEAUTIFUL work. Absolutely awesome... --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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