Teen Poetry #5 |
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Want, but can't have |
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Terryloveiris_85 Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 61The middle of nowhere |
He's something I want, so very bad. But can't have. I want his sweet smile, so very bad. But can't have. I want his gentle touch, so very bad. But can't have. And I want all his love, so very bad. But can't have. i'd give eternity to be by your side-goo goo dolls/City of Angels soundtrack |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
Short, to the point and nicely done. thanks for the read. "Right now I'm having amnesia and deja vu at the same time. I think I've forgotten this before." |
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Alyssa![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
When i red this: "He's something I want, so very bad. But can't have." I instantly thought of Jeremy and last night. I quoted those exact words! I swear it! and then I cried. But anywayz I reeeeeally liked this because of my situtation and its a small and meaningful piece goodjob! "I have no never-again, I have no always" |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
I agree with Low Man. short, Sweet, to the point. Nicely done. Don't say can't though... Try. |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
Like everyone said..very short..but extremely sweet. Thanks for sharing! ~Nikki~ Smile!! You never know who may be falling in love with it... |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Why not? Good poem. Bel |
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Jessica![]()
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
Like bel said... why not? Very good... you said a lot through your simple words. ![]() |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great job on the poem. Sounds like something we can all relate to though. Some people are just untouchable. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i relate...well written...in a simple and heartfelt way, i liked it. "if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take" - when thugs cry- |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I can relate to what you're saying. I think many people can. You expressed yourself very well. Nicely done. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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