Teen Poetry #5 |
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He Trudges On |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
The sun beats him down. The dust chokes his lungs, And still he trudges on. He doesn’t have a thing But the clothes on his back, The sand sears his feet, And still he trudges on. Neglected by his own, He’s been cast into exile, Doomed to wander the desert, So still he trudges on. Of all the things that I confess, |
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Kevin![]()
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
Its easy to feel were walking that desert alone ![]() but were all walking it together no matter how much it feels like were in exile |
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Jessica![]()
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
Adam, I really enjoyed this one. *hugs* Love you... ![]() ![]() What don't kill you can only make you stronger... |
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angel_2401 Member
since 2001-06-12
Posts 131Cincinnati, OH |
I like this one. I hope to see more!! ![]() I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
I like this. All this horrible stuff happening to him and yet he never gives up. Great write! |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
This poem reminds me of one that I wrote ahile back, any who this is a well flowing, well writen poem. Good job, 'till your next. "Right now I'm having amnesia and deja vu at the same time. I think I've forgotten this before." |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
message was agreat one...i can relate...as i am trudging of this path in life. if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this one a lot. Well done here. I hope to see some more. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Strong imagery here, as well as a strong message! Write on! ![]() -Leah Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Just as everyone said.. Nice, powerful message, and wonderful images. I really liked this one. Nicely done, Adam! --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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