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We Were Friends |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding 
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We were friends and we were lovers Now we're back to friends If that even, we haven't talked for a month. It hurt a lot at first but now I've accepted It's actually better this way I think I've learned a lot and grown up even more. I held incredible feelings for you Now they're just memories But that's okay cause life goes on. You loved me in your own, special little way You taught me how to trust again I was shattered when you found me and now I'm okay. If Commodus was vexed, then I'm perfectly fine I know I can love again I just don't know who or when I will. It was great while it lasted but it just didn't last I'm actually glad you left me Cause I had to learn to love myself. I owe you more than you know More than you'll ever know More than you want to know. I owe you my sole, my sock and my toe ring... Since you STOLE MY SHOE AND WON'T GIVE IT BACK!!! *~*LOL. Sorry you guys, but I couldn't resist putting that in there. He actually did steal my shoe, and wouldn't give it back once upon a time. This isn't one of my best (especially with the last part, eh?), but I needed to say 'Goodbye, and I'm over you' somehow. I'll end up writing a better one (or worse, depends what your humor's like) later! Rhonda  "Amy, can you PLEASE come to Spain with us so that we have someone to keep Rhonda calm?" - Mr. Ardiel *insert hysterical laughter from me here* |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
hahaha...i loved the ending...gave the poema great twist...it made me jump up...saying "huh?!"...but the begining migh i say was nicely expressed...hahaha..hope to see more...bye  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
ha, this has a funny ending but i really love the stanzas before that the most. this was...well, incredibly powerful and applicable to my life. i was kind of stunned at first because i think i've had the verbatim thoughts!! so i feel for you, except not on that shoe issue, you're alone on that one...  This is very touching. I hope things work out for you, best of luck, etc. There really isn't anything to say except that i know where you're coming from."so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Wow great work Skyfire, I really enjoyed the read... writers block... hmm. Very well done and keep on sharing. Andrew |
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!!! Member
since 2000-08-12
Posts 137VA (U.S.A) |
yknow, its funny that all the times i had writer's block, i just wrote a poem about my writer's block, and BOOM! it was gone... i didnt actually post it (well once i did), but that helped to get the ball rolling. just a suggestion. anyway, nice poem, and a pretty funny ending. Keep up the good work! |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
A good way to get over writers block is to write funny stuff, like this. Also, I keep a little notebook of ideas for when I get writers block, and it helps. You should try it. *Amanda* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
LMAO when I read sole i thought i spelled SOUL wrong but then i read on and got it. Funny as hell. I loved the ending!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
hahahaha...very funny ending there. Hopefully you did get over this guy in writing this piece. Keep smiling.  ~AF~ Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
the ending is actually very good I liked this |
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thedarkangel Member
since 2001-05-12
Posts 74~*~the cutest~*~ |
wikid skyfire. great work love peace and eyeliner angel -x- The road ahead is as long as you make it. Make it worth the trip ~*~jon bon jovi~*~ |
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scout Member
since 2001-06-16
Posts 175no place owns me |
if someone stole my shoes, i wouldn't know what to do, the shoes are the foundation upon we walk on.... anyways keep walking. xscoutx |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
HAHAHA! LMAO. The ending is so funny! That really got my rollin... thanks for the laugh! As for the situation... wow, I know how that feels. It's hard to get over someone that you grew close to like that. Good luck! Nice poem, I really enjoyed it! --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Your ending is hilarious lol That was totally unexpected definitely caught me offguard Great write and keep sharing Thanks for the read hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
The ending was funny. But the seriousness of the rest of the poem was great! I can relate. I liekd this alot. |
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