Teen Poetry #5 |
telling you the truth |
Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I'll tell you the truth now. I've lost someone I care about. Actually, make that two. I've become scared of someone close to me, afraid to leave my room when they come home from work. It's not as bad as it could be, and I guess it could be worse, but I have this anger inside me, and it makes me want to curse. I want to hurt him badly, the one who took Jesica away. She shouldn'ta left this world, that cold dark sad day. I want to share this with you, because I know you are the one, who will hold me while I cry, and call me you're hunny-bun. But I won't tell you the truth, because you're life might be worse, you're father's no where to be found, atleast I have one, right? There's someone else I loved, who I found out was prejudice towards people of different races, and it makes me mad. Telling you the truth, could take it all away, but I don't want to dump all my problems on you, you're one of the people that i lost. Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by. |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
Alyssa ~ To be honest with you, I didn't understand this. It's like you were talking about several diffrent things in one poem. Could ya clear it up for me? I want to be able to understand this one better... |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Not my fav of your posts Allysa. I like the thoughts here though... But the style/form could have been shaped up much better. Keep posting. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
It was just a rant. I had a lot of things going through my mind and it was driving me crazy. Check out Teen Chat, cuz I might post my problems there. Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked the vent. Thought you did fine. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I really liked this, Allysa. Very sad... Nicely done. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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bOoGaSuGa Member
since 2001-08-03
Posts 54 |
i thought it was pretty good |
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