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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2001-07-31 03:29 PM


I've run out of ideas.
     I'm plum outta luck.
But why'd you hug me yesterday
     when you say I'm not the one.
I've run out of time
     and time is all I've got.
But why'd you call me yesterday
     when you say it's not fun.
I've run out of thoughts
     and the poems that go w/ them.
But why are you like that
     when you say we're just friends?
BLAH BLAH BLAHBITY
     BLAH BLAH BLAH.


Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself.  That's what I live by.

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1 posted 2001-07-31 03:50 PM


Interesting style....this place needs it. I liked it!  

"Nothing will stop me, and whether I'm here or wherever I may be, I'll always have the same feelings, I'll say what I feel." ~Lennon
  

Jessica
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2 posted 2001-07-31 05:36 PM


I agree with Moe - intresting style. I liked it  
Spice
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3 posted 2001-07-31 07:01 PM


I agree, I liked the form of this one. It went perfectly with the tone of this one.
Man I have those SAME thoughts all the time. Guys are SO confusing. It drives me insane. 2 imparticular people...I just want to shake em and ask em what the hell is going through their heads. HeHeHe. ANYWAY- I liked this one alot... I thought you did a great job on it.

cutie2005
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4 posted 2001-07-31 08:51 PM


Hey,
  That was nice!! Short and to the point!! haha I liked it a lot!! Thanks for sharing!
      Always,
        Amanda  

If you love someone you would go to the end of the world for them!



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5 posted 2001-07-31 09:26 PM


sis i am so with you! jeremy says this and then he says that and i get my hopes up and it SUCKS like today when i was workin, i asked him "are u just sittin around here or do u want somethin" and hes like "yeah i want something, but i aint gonna say what" he said this while checkin me out!
nice poem btw

"I have no never-again, I have no always"
Pablo Nerudo

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6 posted 2001-08-01 02:31 AM


interetsing...i thought how youw rote this was nicely creative...great job.

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Allysa
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7 posted 2001-08-01 12:39 PM


I'm having one of those "life sucks" times of my life right now. BLAH.

Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself.  That's what I live by.

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8 posted 2001-08-03 04:53 PM


I thought the poem was nice, but the ending was weird hehe. I enjoyed the poem though.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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9 posted 2001-08-04 06:25 PM


Interesting ending... hehe.  I enjoyed this!  Nicely done.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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