Teen Poetry #5 |
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This is the story about a call that changed my destiny... LOL Sorry, BSB moment! |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA ![]() |
A photograph in her hand, a girl sits on her bed. She reaches for the telephone, as fear flows through her head. Four months ago it ended. They haven’t talked much since. But, she gathers up the courage, though filled with hesitance. What she is about to do, she really cannot explain. But if she doesn’t take a chance, she just might go insane. She begins to dial digits on her cordless telephone. Sweaty palms, racing heart, what if he’s not home? She’s trembling a little bit as the phone begins to ring. One... two... five rings now, nobody’s answering. And so the girl hangs up, lets out a frustrated sigh. Since nobody is home right now, later, again, she’ll try. "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
the discription was awesome...soo well expressed...i could feel the feelings in this one...i enjoyed it ![]() ![]() im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is really good. Wow... very familiar feelings here... all too familiar. The sweaty palms, shaky knees. Love sucks, lol. This is very good. If this is about you, then best of luck. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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Skyfire![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Oh the familiararity. (woah. Big word) I like the way you described all of it! Great job! Rhonda ![]() "Amy, can you PLEASE come to Spain with us so that we have someone to keep Rhonda calm?" - Mr. Ardiel *insert hysterical laughter from me here* |
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Marshalzu![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great work I really enjoyed the read ![]() Keep on sharing. Andrew "Here we are again finding ourselves at the end Of the wrong stick I guess it's far too late I'm building up the barricades In my head" -My Vitriol |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This one was really good. Great description. I know the feeling all too well, but in my case I usually can never finish dialing before I chicken out. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Raven Skye Member
since 2001-03-03
Posts 112.In a House. |
that was scary cuz at that moment I was calling up my friend christine to tell her that I got floor seats for the backstreet boys and I started reading this and she's not home! AHH!! That's crazy. But hey this is a beautiful poem. I relate to it very well. GOOD JOB!! *×´¨`·.×*Raven Skye*×´¨`·.×* |
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Heavens Tears![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Great job. Like most people, I have felt that way too many times. But I hope yours worked out. *Amanda* |
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Tamma![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
LoL...I've ben there before...But I've never gotten up enough courage to call back *sigh* I think I'd be better off not calling, anyway ![]() *sigh* nobody cares |
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scout Member
since 2001-06-16
Posts 175no place owns me |
i only give 2 rings before i hang up... xscoutx |
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FoxXena Member
since 2001-06-13
Posts 141where dragons play, children run free and foxes are never hunted |
Well that was really touching. I liked the poem-line (kinda like story-line only applies to poems). ~*~It is said that laughter is the shortest distance between two people...~*~ |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Nice one, Sara. ![]() When people don't answer their phones it is soooo annoying. Thanks for the read. ~AF~ Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!! |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
dial *67 first before you call, so if he has caller ID, he wouldn't know it's you ![]() what does bsb moment mean? hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare [This message has been edited by acire (edited 06-29-2001).] |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
BSB is the Backstreet Boys silly! *LMAO* "This is the story about a call that changed my destiny" is a sample of lyrics from their EVIL song "the call"... This is the first of two poems about me calling my ex... I will post the second one when I FINALLY get ahold of the little craphead *LOL* Such loving words ![]() |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this one. You did well on expressing frustration here. I hope things improve though ![]() ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Jenn Cirrincione![]() ![]()
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
LOL I know this feeling all too well...Oh my!! And yeah, I don't like that song too much...so, go ahead steal the title... Muhahaha!! ![]() Jenn "Woah my love, my darling, I've hungered for your touch a long, lonely time"- Unchained Melody |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
this is really great!! sorry for taking so long to reply..but I really like this poem..as I can relate to it! thanks for sharing! -->Don't frown. You never know who is falling in love with your smile. |
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