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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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Ok right now...at this exact moment. There is over 100 girls having abortions. as you read this there are enough amounts of wasted to feed a third world country...at this second babies are being born, still borns, and of mothers dying of childbed fever. So young after that frightening night a mistake was made seed was planted in hate and rage I'm now 100 years old so small and young in body yet so dead in mind I smile without hearing words you see no one knows my secret Can anyone help me? Tis the fear that I know will strangle me a visit to the clinic will kill my fear but it won't kill my trauma Bellies swollen with malnutrition no one loves us when can we eat? The itch of the rashes and disease drives us insane OUr land is barren our parents? where are they? they are dead our sunken in eyes show our misery as we wither away as you feed your greed The miracle of life turns to the angel of death mother and child die their souls floating away the strength gone his wife his child the father he has lost everything his thoughts blame him it was his fault his seed that killed her OUr world burns yet it still turns Our knowledge grows smaller everyday we are so young yet so old Tis a refuge I need in this world, but I cant find it Regina If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive. |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
Sad..here Gina.. what made you write this...?? I enjoyed it..it was very powerful. Great writing, i think that the lines were a little short though..just an opinion.. Title could be... um... maybe...Realitysignature--> ~Jeff~ "Smoking kills. If you're killed, you've lost a very important part of your life." -Brooke Shields [This message has been edited by JBaker515 (edited 07-27-2001).] |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
This was very sad, and emotional. I too am curious as to why you wrote this. It really makes you think, even though I do agree with abortion, it shouldnt be used as an excuse to be irresponsible. Nicely done here. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
The abortion wasnt used for irresponsibilty at all. the poem is like amirror to me. thanks for the replies |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
Gina! is this about what you told me the other night, cuase i totally got it. Iam so sorry about all of that. I feel for ya, I've been there before!! "A friend's shoulder makes a |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
this is a sad thought regi..did you know that the percentage of children dying from the ages of 0 to 12 months in places like australia is 1-2%..whereas the percentage of babies dying before they are one is as high as 30-50% in developing countries!?!...  i enjoyed this poem a lot..as with all of your poems...but i must say that it didnt hold that certain "regi power" in it. the title?..i cant think of anything right now...sorry..:O thanks for sharing! "Killer in me is a killer in you, my love |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
ina hey hey, i liked this one a lot. the verse about the mother and child dying was definetly my favorite. i hope none of this is happenin to u...a title? um..."wasted lives"??? i have no idea lol sorry i suck at titles. good work. -fear- i'm a penguin! i'm a penguin! i'm a cute lil penguiiiin! i'm a penguin i'm a penguin! i eat FISH!--tis the pretty penguin song |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
I agree with fear ~ "Wasted Lives" Great piece here, so many women and unborn children go through this. I would elaborate, but.... ya know...? I loved this Regi. Yet another wonderful write here. What don't kill you can only make you stronger... |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
this is really good.. very powerful impact. and very emotional. great write  |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
*blink* I posted a reply to this...but its gone..and I can't remember what I wrote... Anyway, loved the poem Ina. -Kosetsu Of all the things that I confess, |
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~Dark Angel~ New Member
since 2001-07-21
Posts 5 |
this is really nice, and really sad. you got the message across really well i think, it really touched me. not all poems do that. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
First off, why are people caling you Gina? The madness must stop! Anyhow......I really thought you had great thoughts in this poem. Wowness, i mean this is a real deep and serious topic and for you to even think about writing something like this takes a bit of courage. I couldn't do it, no no. Well done on it, lots of power.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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levon6618 Junior Member
since 2001-07-29
Posts 10 |
This is a very powerful poem. It made me think. Good read. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
wow...this was an awesome piece...im loving it...the meaning was so powerful yet so sad...and the title i think should be..."truth"...cause thats all i saw...this hit me home in a emotional way...bye Ina  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
The power and emotions going through this poem are amazing. Beautoful work, yet again. I agree with you.. it's a sad thing. Unfortunately, something we (as a society) have to deal with. I hope many girls are learning lessons from watching others' mistakes. THanks for sharing this with us --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Wowsers, Regi. Abortion is a tricky topic to write about and you wrote about it well. You had the right degree of emotion in it without becomming a Hallmark card. It is sad when such incidents occur. Anyway, great work. ~AF~ "Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Ina, you've captured these truths all so well. What else can I do, I can definitely not doubt your poems You've been amazing with your writing Keep it up, okies? *hugs* hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Allysa, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Ma |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
great poem very well written. robin bye lizzy,javi,acire,cherish,SEA,vicky,laura,andrea,jessa and anyone else i forgot i will be back to torment you soon muhahahahahahaha |
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