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chasing rain
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0 posted 2001-07-27 02:40 PM


As feathered thoughts brushed by my ear
The magic gently touched my mind
And all who slept were calm of fear
As I walked on silently.
I left this dream world far behind
As wind sang softly in my ear
Like evening larks and ghosts combined
It tugged my shirt quite violently.

Down the road, I seemed to walk
Along the crystal river's bend
A secret soon to be unlocked
A secret found unwillingly.
The clouds and sky began to blend
As rain fell down like dust of chalk
A stranger I was to pretend
A friend was I, but secretly.

Through forest leaves and darkened sky
I ambled on to find the spell
That to my voice came no reply
That held this wood so wordlessly.
I came upon an ancient well
That echoed loud with every cry
Where the darkness seemed to dwell
And seemed to live eternally.

A chilling song had filled my ears
And frozen frost had filled my heart
And my courage succumbed to fears
To the evil beckoning.
The darkness stroked my frigid heart
And then came forth, the thought of tears
That drifted down, a work of art
That painted this so menacing.

The moon was veiled by the mist
That touched my cheek, then sent adrift
To the ground, my tears did kiss
Which kept the earth from shivering.
The trees then took this foreign gift
And laid it on the earthen fist
Then life began to slightly shift
Where then I saw leaves quivering.

The darkness left my mind in whole
Yet left my heart to break alone
But freed the body of my soul
To waft above unendlessly.
And over time, the light was shown
Through the leaves of wooden souls
The trees had come to life from stone
And grew to heights quite shamlessly.

Beneath my cloak I smile more
As I go down the bony road
To find that single open door
That leads me on a-travelling.
The more I walked, the less I rode
And made my way to river's shore
Where I saw the way it flowed
The road I saw unravelling.

This road did take me high and far
Over hill and over dale
To a place above the stars
To see my world so daunting.
The trees no longer looked so frail
The earth no longer marked with scars
And so thus ends this darkened tale
Of a world so haunting.

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The end.
FINALLY!!   I changed it a tad because the other one didn't work. So...yeah. THE END! Have a nice day.  

-Leah

ps- my head hurts...



Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

[This message has been edited by chasing rain (edited 07-27-2001).]

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Ina
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1 posted 2001-07-27 02:44 PM


This was very good work Leah. very powerful.
keep writing.

REgina

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2 posted 2001-07-27 02:52 PM


Leah..
this was superb, one of your best for sure.
Keep up this work
Peace.

~Jeff~

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3 posted 2001-07-28 12:58 PM


Hey,

      Well their isn't much left to say after my reply in "Breaking Spells". The only thing I have to say is this is a job  well done. I enjoyed reading the final copy of it. Thank you for the great read, and until the next one

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4 posted 2001-07-29 12:42 PM


Wow long  
I thought you did just fine on this one. The final version was good. Well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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5 posted 2001-08-04 12:23 PM


Leah!  THis is gorgeous!  Long, yes, but well worth the read.  I am very impressed with where you've come as a poet.  You've amazed me with your latest pieces.  This one's another one of yours that going straight to the library.  Thanks for sharing.. I absolutely loved this one.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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