Teen Poetry #5 |
Dark Journey: Finished (originally Breaking spells) |
chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
As feathered thoughts brushed by my ear The magic gently touched my mind And all who slept were calm of fear As I walked on silently. I left this dream world far behind As wind sang softly in my ear Like evening larks and ghosts combined It tugged my shirt quite violently. Down the road, I seemed to walk Along the crystal river's bend A secret soon to be unlocked A secret found unwillingly. The clouds and sky began to blend As rain fell down like dust of chalk A stranger I was to pretend A friend was I, but secretly. Through forest leaves and darkened sky I ambled on to find the spell That to my voice came no reply That held this wood so wordlessly. I came upon an ancient well That echoed loud with every cry Where the darkness seemed to dwell And seemed to live eternally. A chilling song had filled my ears And frozen frost had filled my heart And my courage succumbed to fears To the evil beckoning. The darkness stroked my frigid heart And then came forth, the thought of tears That drifted down, a work of art That painted this so menacing. The moon was veiled by the mist That touched my cheek, then sent adrift To the ground, my tears did kiss Which kept the earth from shivering. The trees then took this foreign gift And laid it on the earthen fist Then life began to slightly shift Where then I saw leaves quivering. The darkness left my mind in whole Yet left my heart to break alone But freed the body of my soul To waft above unendlessly. And over time, the light was shown Through the leaves of wooden souls The trees had come to life from stone And grew to heights quite shamlessly. Beneath my cloak I smile more As I go down the bony road To find that single open door That leads me on a-travelling. The more I walked, the less I rode And made my way to river's shore Where I saw the way it flowed The road I saw unravelling. This road did take me high and far Over hill and over dale To a place above the stars To see my world so daunting. The trees no longer looked so frail The earth no longer marked with scars And so thus ends this darkened tale Of a world so haunting. ===== The end. FINALLY!! I changed it a tad because the other one didn't work. So...yeah. THE END! Have a nice day. -Leah ps- my head hurts... Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... [This message has been edited by chasing rain (edited 07-27-2001).] |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
This was very good work Leah. very powerful. keep writing. REgina |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
Leah.. this was superb, one of your best for sure. Keep up this work Peace. ~Jeff~ |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Well their isn't much left to say after my reply in "Breaking Spells". The only thing I have to say is this is a job well done. I enjoyed reading the final copy of it. Thank you for the great read, and until the next one -- Linc "Blood Moon" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow long I thought you did just fine on this one. The final version was good. Well done. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Leah! THis is gorgeous! Long, yes, but well worth the read. I am very impressed with where you've come as a poet. You've amazed me with your latest pieces. This one's another one of yours that going straight to the library. Thanks for sharing.. I absolutely loved this one. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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