Teen Poetry #5 |
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So many places |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
There've been so many things, i've wished i'd done. So many places, i hope i'll go. And all the things, I've wished i've done, So many things, I'd do them with you. And all the places, I still want to go, So many places, I'd go there with you. And you've things, You've wished you'd done. So many places, You hope to go. And all the things, And all the places. You'd do them with her, You'd go there with her. There's so many things, I never want to do. So many things, I never want to see. You'll show me those things, i never want to see, Or do. If you do them with her. |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Sounds like yer going through a rough time with a fellow and a woman companion that he's with rather than being with you, correct? Anyhow, I thought you did the poem just fine. Hoping to see more! ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
Actually kind of, to make it worse, shes one of my best friends... They just broke up... but he really still likes her... which makes it hard... thankz for the comment on the poem, ALLIE |
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since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I've been here....it sux...but u expressed it well in this poem...nice job and i hope he chooses to go with u instead of her.. ![]() |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Yeah..things can be tough like that. I link the repitition got a little old near the end, but overall, I really liked it. Hope things turn out alright. -Kosetsu "Love, like the Rose, is desired. And like the Rose, Love has its thorns." - Unknown |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I know how this feels, except for me it was my guy best friend and my girl best friend....it hurts......he eventually realized she was no good ![]() ![]() |
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since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Ouch... tough situation. *hugs* Sorry you have to go through that. I know it's no fun... but if she was a good friend she'd take into consideration you feelings. Friend will always be there long after the boyfriend/girlfriend will be. Nicely done, I enjoyed this read. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Too bad about the situation, Allie. Not everything is meant to be unfortanately. Thanks for sharing this. Hopefully in writing this, it eased some of your pain. ~AF~ "Reality is just a crutch for people who can't cope with drugs." -- Robin Williams |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
OUch. Yes, a VERY horrible situation. The pain kills you. Sorry about this. The poem was great. It really shows your emotions well. Nice write. ![]() |
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