Teen Poetry #5 |
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Break the Chains |
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Heavens Tears![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677![]() |
I quit holding on So long ago Or so I thought. I thought it was possible To let go without forgetting And it is But I do have to forgive... It wasn't my choice For these chains to remain I thought they were gone But those heavy chains were still there Chaining my heart and soul to the past While my mind and body pushed into the future I am torn in two by these chains And this time Strength will not help me The only solution Is to break these chains Without losing a part of me But these chains are so strong... I know I cant go back I cant relive those painful years Even to free myself But how can I go on With a part of me lost? I need more time to find the real me... |
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DarkenedShadow Member
since 2001-07-23
Posts 114Kansas |
I feel you on this one in paticular. What strength can help us in time of unknown peril and reason?? I've asked my self a qustion or two in the same. /Nick/ |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Wow, I totally connect with this poem. There is one specific instance in my life that I wish I could take back. Take back the time, the pain, the effort. But your still stuck, no matter what you do. I love it. This is going in my library. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this one a lot! I thought you wrote it very nicely! I look forward to your future pieces. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Heavens Tears![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Thanks. I didnt like this one as much as my others. Does anyone notice something missing, or something that sticks out? I wanted to see if I could make this one better. |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This was pretty good, although not as good as some of your other peices. I don't know if there's much that can be fixed, other than the repition of "these chains". That phrase is repeated many times, and begins to stick out a whole lot. Like I said, I don't think that much can be done here. Thanks for sharing, though. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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