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Wood_Stock
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0 posted 2001-07-22 03:28 AM



The name "Autonomous" means advanced... don't ask......... heh heh...  I just saw the word when I was trying to come up with a name, and well, that's what it got!!

Anyway on with the show...
-Autonomous-


Words of wisdom,
From within.
A newfound insight,
On everything.

Should one trust,
What's inside.
When is knowledge truth,
And not a lie?

With age comes wisdom,
So, I'm told.
Though, what makes us wise,
And when are we old?

And is what I think,
Just a symptom of youth?
Or can there be found in it,
An element of truth?

Wisdom is opinion,
Not matter of fact.
So how can one hold insight,
That the other ones lack?

Now if this is so,
then what can I do?
Just speak my own "wisdom",
And hope that it's true?


Wood_Stock.

© Copyright 2001 Noel Wilson - All Rights Reserved
TopGunLauren
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1 posted 2001-07-22 05:09 AM


Awsome poem I loved it keep up the awsome work!
  Lauren

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2 posted 2001-07-22 01:11 PM


"Now if this is so,
then what can I do?
Just speak my own "wisdom",
And hope that it's true?"

I think that's what we all do. I really love this piece, it's very deep and thought provoking. It flows well, and the wording is very well done. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

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3 posted 2001-07-23 11:03 AM


You can only gain wisdom from experience. If you have enough experience, then you can talk about certain topics of conversation. A symptom of youth is prejudging and assuming to know all. None of us can deny that simple fact.
I like your piece. Like Erica said, it is thought provoking and it certainly will raise a few different opinions.
Thanks for the read, Noel.  

~AF~

Tearless grief bleeds inwardly.
~ Christian Nevell Bovee ~

DarkenedShadow
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4 posted 2001-07-23 11:26 AM


I'm amazed on how you can take the thoughts from my head and write them when i could not. The wonderous part of this peice is that i belive you're right, do i have not have as much "wisdom" as that of my mother? Keep it coming  /Nick/
Spice
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5 posted 2001-07-23 09:33 PM


Interesting piece.
I liked it.

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6 posted 2001-07-24 01:31 AM


I thought it was fine althought I thought some points in here were not as valid as they could have been.

"When is knowledge truth,
And not a lie?"- If a certain portion of a persons knowledge was a lie, would it be knowledge? I seriously don't think so.
So I really didn't get those verses and why you encorperated it within your poem.

I liked the poem and what it had to say, for the most part. Well done.


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Wood_Stock
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7 posted 2001-07-25 03:11 AM


Well well well.... I can only assume Dopey read my critisism on the quality of some peoples comments... heh heh...

And I thank you for your words, on my latest two poems.

True, in "Shattered Mirrors", the last line was forced, and I've been fiddling with it ever since I wrote it, but I'm yet to find a way to get what I want to say in with the flow of the whole thing, so it will have to do for the moment...

Secondly:

"When is knowledge truth,
And not a lie?"

I'm sorry man, but now I just think your being pedantic...

What I'm saying here is:

We think we know something, but do we really ever know the whole truth?
Knowlege can be a dangerous thing, when its misunderstood.  And also, the truth can be deceptive, and even when we think we know something...  Do we really KNOW??  Or do we just fall into the trap of thinking we know.

And that is what I was trying to convey...  Maybe it wasn't clear... but you've gotta have an open mind with these things.  I don't even know if what I just said makes any sense... hmmm...

Anyway, interperet as you will.

Until next time.

Wood_Stock

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8 posted 2001-07-29 02:35 AM


The third and fourth stanza here really caught my eye.  I Also REALLY like what you said about wisdome being opinion.  I agree with that 100%.  There's no need for fact to prove one's wisdom... you can throw facts around all you want, but that won't prove a thing.  I really enjoyed the format here as well... the flow was awesome!  Nice work, Noel... I really enjoyed this also.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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