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Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2001-07-20 11:47 AM

CORRUPTION OF AN ALREADY
CORRUPTED MIND

Let the maggots eat away
at your brain let them
devour your corruption
Help fill your world
with hate

Pour some more of your
greed as fuel let
the world see the
corruption of an already
corrupted mind

Prove that I am weak
Prove that I will be
dead by the age of 20
Where is mercy?

Don't cry for my freedom
Do I turn what justice
and intelligence that is
left into a fryed
zucchni?

The maggots grow and
rott my brain time
has gone by so
slowly,so painfully
Yet the pain is only
dulled to a slight
murmer of a
narcotic

Regina Levy

If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive.

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

1 posted 2001-07-20 10:32 PM

"Don't cry for my freedom
Do I turn what justice
and intelligence that is
left into a fryed
zucchni?"
^^ That is totally amazing. The title for this piece is really good. It is so annoying and frustrating how people cannot help or begin to understand the extent of someones pain. The ending was great. I can connect with that really well.

Thanks for the read, Regi.

~AF~

Psychopathic chickens are plotting against me...

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

2 posted 2001-07-21 12:14 PM

Those were my favorite lines as well. I was about to quote them also. Nicely done, Ina! I am loving this series. Every poem is more powerful than the next... Nice work! On to the next in the series...

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

3 posted 2001-07-21 03:41 AM

damn!!!! i sit here and think "one of her poems is going to suck so badly, but i'll have to pretend it's great" then i read your amazing poetry and am awed once more. great job ina, here's to none of ur poems sucking *holds up imaginery wine glass* :-)
-fear-

i'm a penguin! i'm a penguin! i'm a cute lil penguiiiin! i'm a penguin i'm a penguin! i eat FISH!--tis the pretty penguin song

mistic
Member

since 2001-05-06

Posts 233
Idaho, U.S.A.