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Raindrop Tears |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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Sometimes it's too hard to forget, sometimes it's too hard to remember, but the thing that will always be with me, are the raindrop tears. When an angel in heaven weeps for someone, the raindrops brush their smooth skin, it's the raindrop tears that keep us alive, when we're missin' someone who's gone. When a tired young angel wept for us, it rained till the sky turned black, and the only thing anyone could feel, were the raindrop tears. Sometimes it's to hard to let go, sometimes it's to hard to say goodbye, but the thing that will always be with me, are the raindrop tears that fall from her eyes. Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
This was amazing work Allysa. Very intersting. Keep it up never stop writing! Regina |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Thanks!   Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
I really liked this Allysa. For some odd reason the word "Soft" was in my head the whole itme...in other words...The poem was calming, soothing. Very nice. I loved it. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I REALLY liked this, Allysa! This is one of those poems where there is no rhyme scheme, but there doesn't need to be. It has a certain internal rhyme that really worked well with the content. That's another thing... the content was AWESOME. I LOVED what you were saying about tears. Very nicely done... The flow was excellent, and well written. Nice work. I enjoyed this. Kudos to you! --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought this poem was quite sad. Well done on expressing it all Allysa.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
The imagery of raindrop tears was outstanding! You've done a really good job with this, Allysa. Be proud!  Thanks for the read. ~AF~ "Write something, even if it's just a suicide note." -- Gore Vidal |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Thanks ya all! Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by. |
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DarkenedShadow Member
since 2001-07-23
Posts 114Kansas |
I saw your name by this poem and had to read it and just as I thought it was beautiful. I kept having this vison in my head of an angel and a little gilr for some reason. It did its work and that was to be excellent. /Nick/ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Allysa, this is a venture to writing a different style of poetry, and you did a marvelous job. Impressive!!! Keep it up. hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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