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xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

0 posted 2001-07-15 01:16 AM

So many things happen,
So many things go wrong.
So many damaging words,
So many meaningful songs.

Not enough meaning,
Not enough truth.
Not enough care,
Not enough to loose.

Too much betrayal,
Too much denied.
Too many times a heart broken,
Too many tears cried.

JBaker515

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since 2001-02-28

Posts 458
Dartmouth College

1 posted 2001-07-15 01:18 AM

Here you go again...
Awesome, i liked this one, short and packed with meaning!!

Those are the best, and the title was perfect!!

Masterful, keep these up, and i wont stop reading ur work!!

~Jeff~

"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."

CwboyAtHeart
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since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

2 posted 2001-07-15 01:33 AM

I liked this one a lot! Short and to the point, yet very well written. Good job.

- Cody -

If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-07-15 02:19 AM

short...but, so much is behind this...hit me home, Michelle

...i liked it...you written it VERY well.

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

4 posted 2001-07-15 02:50 AM

It had alot of meaning, Yea- but I dunno....It just didn't hit the spot.
Keep posting.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-07-15 05:18 AM

I thought the ending rocked. I happened to like this poem a lot. Great job here!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

~sugarpie313~
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since 2000-09-14

Posts 375
Maine, USA

6 posted 2001-07-15 01:04 PM

i love this!!! it was so good!!

you portrayed the unfortunate truth all to well... *L*

Valerie

"...And i want to take you down, but your soul could not be found, doesn't matter much you see cause your disease is killing me..." -Saliva

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

7 posted 2001-07-16 12:07 PM

Thanks everyone for your replies!! I had so many feelings in me at once and they were like coming out as one words and not like in a flow like usual so i made it into this!! LOL...Thanks for reading it all!! I appreciate it!!!

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

8 posted 2001-07-16 11:07 AM

I REALLY liked this one. The format rocked, and the ending was awesome. Nicely done! Keep posting all your work.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

Hill's_Chatabox
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since 2001-07-10

Posts 46
USA

9 posted 2001-07-16 01:07 PM

I liked your post a lot. I was right to point and very meaningful. Keep it up and thanxs for the reply. I enjoyed your poem I can't wait to read more.
~Hillary~

Shoot for the moon cause if you miss you'll still end up in the *stars*!!!

Don't tell me that you love me unless you mean it, Beacuse I might do so

Raven Skye
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since 2001-03-03

Posts 112
.In a House.

10 posted 2001-07-16 01:56 PM

"Too much betrayal,
Too much denied.
Too many times a heart broken,
Too many tears cried."

AHHHH SO TRUE!!! WOOHOO!

*×´¨`·.×*Raven Skye*×´¨`·.×*
Don't just trust yourself,
learn what parts of yourself to trust.

TopGunLauren
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since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

11 posted 2001-08-20 03:50 AM

I was looking back on all my old poems and you replied to almost all of them so I wanted to find one of yours.This is such an awsome poem and I love it just like I love all of your other poems.Keep up the awsome work!
Lauren

allie
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since 2001-07-09

Posts 218
Australia

12 posted 2001-08-20 07:02 AM

loved the ending, and the pattern
Nice work realy enjoyed it!

ALLIE

xShUgArHiGhx

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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

13 posted 2001-08-22 11:29 PM

Thank everyone who replied!! i was kinda shocked to see such great replies to this one and to get replies after it had been posted so long ago but i thank lauren for that

Thanks everyone!!

TopGunLauren
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since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

14 posted 2001-08-24 12:02 PM

Powerful poem I loved it it is full of emotions and I know exactly ehat your talking about.Keep up the awsome work!
Lauren

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