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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677
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Carved from wood Full of splinters But certainly no tears Just wood and a chisel By those cursed hands… Wood and strings That’s all this puppet was meant to be Strings to guide it And not a care in the world To full its wooden head. But suddenly the strings are broken And from somewhere deep inside Come thoughts I never knew were there. Never knew could be there… My life goes from being guided by strings And not being able to have feelings To stumbling around in the dark While still learning to use my own two legs. Having to deal with all of these new emotions Things I have felt all along Just could not recognize For I knew no words to describe them… I am still learning to walk And I am so scared my world Will crumble once again But every once in a while I find a long lost string Each string offers a little more hope Hope that one day I will be able to live on my own, Well-balanced With pride and compassion Not as a puppet with strings But as a woman with purpose… *Amanda* |
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Raven Skye Member
since 2001-03-03
Posts 112.In a House. |
I liked this. It's beautiful. *×´¨`·.×*Raven Skye*×´¨`·.×* |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
This was an awesome poem. i found the extended metaphor of being a puppet an awesome theme for this poem. Great job.  |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This poem was great. It had a very optimistic message... something that's different from most of the other poetry I've read by you. I really enjoyed this. Using the puppet as the metaphor was pretty cool. Nicely done.. I look forward to your next. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
first of the message had so much too it...i REALLY liked this piece...much to think about...enjoyed the read...great poem,Amanda im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Amanda your poem was great, big time thinking poem, keep it up |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
great piece. i liked it. keep up the great work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked the ending. I thought it was powerful.....a woman with purpose! Ohhh yea! Well done here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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DarkenedShadow Member
since 2001-07-23
Posts 114Kansas |
I liked the visual it gave when I first started to read it then it turned unbeknownest to me... but hey when it turned into you thats when it got alot better and more emotional. Thats what i like to see, emotion. /Nick/ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Never forget that thru life we always have someone to lean to. Either your parents, siblings, friends, or God. Thanks for the read. keep sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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