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tish76 New Member
since 2001-07-18
Posts 3 |
Today is a day without one smile. I will say good-bye to you my good friend. I walk this heartache mile by mile. Please come and put this heartache to an end. I'll never forget you because you cared. All the bright and shining days are gone now. Don't ever forget the good times we shared. Coping is hard, someone show me how. Today is a cloudy and stormy day. The friendship we shared meant worlds to me. Life's so unfair, why must you go away? My heart feels like it's in the deepest sea. I'd give everything for just one more day, To hear you laughing, and to see you smile. You loved everyone, each and everyday. I wish you would stay, just for awhile. Lord help me, someday we will meet again. I will forever hold you in my heart. Mom, you were always my very best friend. A long dark path I now begin to start... Leticia Faye Albert 11-19-99 |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
this was awesome. it was brimming with emotion. great work...hope to see more. Regina If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive. |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
This one was great, I really liked it. Definitely had a lot of strong emotion in it. Good job. - Cody - |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow.. lots of powerful emotions here. This really touched me.. very well written. I really like the way you held off telling who you were talking about until the end. I thought it was a boyfriend or something... *hugs* I'm sorry you had to go through something like that. You wrote this very well. I look forward to seeing more from you... hopefully soon. Oh yeah, and I absolutely love your name. Very pretty... Nice work on the poem  --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
I read this through again after I found out who it was about.... And the feeling scomes shinning through even stronger. It's so sad... I can't even imagine what it would be like- nor do I want to. You portrayed your emotions wonderfully though. Nice write. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
emotionally filled...this hit home for me...wow...such powerful emotions expressed...such a tough situation..i know...but stay strong, though...and thanks for sharing this..Leticia im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
Mom, you were always my very best friend. A long dark path I now begin to start... this saw me nearly break out in tears....its such a sad poem...the situation sucks but i can see that youre going to get by well...i hope that you come out strong  |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done here. Filled with raw emotion. I enjoyed it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great work, I really enjoyed the read, lots of powerful emotions. Zu |
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DarkenedShadow Member
since 2001-07-23
Posts 114Kansas |
My heart deosn't decieve me, this poem is a wonderful one and I think we all feel in some way these words. Great work... /Nick/ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Being really close to my own mom made me teary eyed reading the last lines. Good luck on you path to life. Be strong. Thanks so much for the beautiful read. hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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