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zarina Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 180
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When I'm crying When I feel like I'm dying When I'm tired of life When my words' as sharp as a knife When I seem small When I think I'm nothing at all ..I need your love. Won't you lift me up Won't you take my hand Won't you kiss my shivering lips Won't you touch me..reach me.. Help me Save me Take my arms Hold me Oh My Love Please Hold me I am always myself. Isn't that enough for you? |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This is a really nice one! I liked it. It had alot of emotion. Very good poem. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Zarina I really liked this. Yet again- I relate. Sometimes thats just all someone would need- a soft hug from their loved one and everything is perfect again. Nice job on this one Zarina.  |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow.. the desperation in this poem is portrayed so well. I enjoyed this, Carina. I think that the power of your words are very evident, and the way you expressed yourself was well done. Nice work. I enjoyed the read, and look forward to seeing more soon! --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Sometimes all I need is a hug, even a cyber hug. It hurts when the person you asks rejects you flat out....*sigh*....anyhow well done on this one. I loved the part of the shivering lips. Nicely done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
I thought this one was really good. It was very well written and had good emotions portayed through it. Thanks for sharing ~Nikki~ It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them. |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
great post, yet sad. you're so talented to give off such emotion through words, congratulations. ALLIE |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Great poem. I could feel the emotion in this piece. Very nice. - Cody - |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
your emotions strongly put..i relate...i liked the poem, Carina im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
*hugs Dopey*  The title reminded me of a line in a Savage Garden song...or was it the title? Uh, I don't know but the piece had some great thoughts in there. Thanks for the read. ~AF~ Psychopathic chickens are plotting against me... |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hey this is kool. i can really relate to the poem. i think we've all been there. god it sucks when you have nobody to hold you though. such emptiness and lonliness. hopefully you always have someone to hold ya :-) and great work on this, i really enjoyed it.bye bye -fear- i'm a penguin! i'm a penguin! i'm a cute lil penguiiiin! i'm a penguin i'm a penguin! i eat FISH!--tis the pretty penguin song |
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zarina Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 180 |
thanks alot.. you guys rocks! hehe I am always myself. Isn't that enough for you? |
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DarkenedShadow Member
since 2001-07-23
Posts 114Kansas |
Its excellent on how much you use your words to explain all the pain you must feel. /Nick/ |
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